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As these aren't going to be anonymous we might as well be open with our ideas and see how we can help each other.
I have two and neither is giving me the feeling I can get it done in a week.
Excuse the crap loglines, this is all very rushed.
The Fourteenth Gland
An ambitious scientist is hunted by both the police and Russian mafia around London for a murder he didn't commit, and for an artefact he doesn't possess - something which is meant to bestow eternal life, called the fourteenth gland.
Genre - chase thriller
Problems - I feel I have a unique hook for this, but it's a complicated script which I'm finding a bit overwhelming to put together - something that could just need longer to do.
Phone Buddy
When a socially awkward musician has a near death experience when he saves his new high tech phone, actually a secret service device destined to infiltrate an unknown drugs ring, he discovers the phone has come to life. Against his wishes, it's now his new best friend and it wants to party, whilst the secret service think he's the gangster.
Genre - slapstick comedy
Problems - I feel this is easier to do, but maybe a little light weight.
Ok, they're a bit different
As Steve pointed out, there is a request that if you enter you carry on, which I find a little off putting.
Happy to consider other writers ideas and share feedback.
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For the fourteenth gland, why not stick with one good guy and one bad guy. Also, make it into a murder. Keep it simple. lol.
For Phone buddy, you're trying to cram too much info. Follow what Babz said: noun + verb + irony = logline. One of the best things I've learned from her.
Hope this helps, Gabe
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As these aren't going to be anonymous we might as well be open with our ideas and see how we can help each other.
That's what the point of the 7WC has always been. To help each other out. Share what you're writing about, ask for help when you are struggling, hold each others hands and help finish the script.
I like that name Phone Buddy, Bill. Very cool name. Definitely has commercial potential, IMHO. Not sure I'm too keen on the premise, though. I think you'd be better off substituting the phone for an actual character. Might be a little too wacky otherwise.
I like this one. It has the potential to be a generic thriller, but I think the sci-fi angle makes it original. Not sure I'm loving the title, though...
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Strange, Bill. My original idea was about a sociopath who receives a phone that starts talking to him and tells him to commit murders . Maybe it's a sign you should go with Phone Buddy, although I do like both ideas.
For mine, I'm thinking I'll name it "Memories of a Forgotten Love". 7 pages in, after I finish the first 10 I'll try and think of a log.
(or any other first name that will work. I haven't really settled on one).
A man who works at lost and found in an airport comes across a cellphone that belongs to his wife's lover. He digs deeper, only to find the man his wife is cheating with is a total weirdo, maybe even a stalker.
(or any other first name that will work. I haven't really settled on one).
A man who works at lost and found in an airport comes across a cellphone that belongs to his wife's lover. He digs deeper, only to find the man his wife is cheating with is a total weirdo, maybe even a stalker.
I'm not feeling your logline, nor the others' either.
Okay, I'd get rid of that for starters-- you don't need it. Then re-work the second half of it.
Yeah... it's definitely not my final log, but I wanted to get the basic story across. Just wanted to know if the story itself was good. But then again, maybe I was too vague.
A stuck up business woman mistakenly buys a stolen phone from a dodgy pawn shop and is suddenly thrust into the life of an unconventional Angel, where mischief and mayhem take their toll in her pursuit to achieve a set of wings.