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Grandma Bear
Posted: May 6th, 2017, 7:31am Report to Moderator
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Play Dead - Apocalypse, Horror, YA - In the aftermath of the zombie apocalypse, one man believes he has the perfect strategy to survive, but what will his plan cost him? 

Rating: 2
Thoughts: I'm assuming the plan is to play dead.  But even though that's the title, it should probably be included in the logline.  I like the idea but the reason it gets a '2' is because I've seen it before. 


TITLE: Play Dead

STORY

Concept is fresh/and or original - 5

Theme is well executed/interweaved - 5

Stakes are clear/conflict is strong and or compelling - 5

Story - 4

Ending - 5

CHARACTER/DIALOGUE

Protagonist(s) is (are) likable and/or compelling - 5

Dialogue reads naturally/believable within this story - 5

Dialogue reveals character -  4

READABILITY

Action text "shows" instead of "tells" - 4

Overall readability - 4

Total: 4.6


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Steve, good job.  I hope you fix this up and show the struggle of walking with the dead.

Oh, when does he sleep?  He certainly can't sleep with the dead...

Dan


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