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Title isn't striking. Too many combinations with "Skin" do already exist. Actually, your exact title is listed 30 to 40 times on imdb!!!
"Tell me, does your head ever catch a chill from all the air rushing through it?"
Good line, changes the mood and serves energy to the conversation.
Tiny note: p6 "Boom! The room shakes." I first thought it's because of the salve, a supernatural effect or sth. and hadn't perceived your description as a banging door.
Well, solid throughout, I'd say. And very down to earth. Good dialogues. I'm not so sure about her last action, unless it's a terrifying image and completes the ironic ending... although I understand the choice, it's how many short films end. Just think about the title, I'd suggest.
The names "mom" and "dad" strike me as anachronistic, although you obviously haven't dated the script. I'd change to "mother" and "father" for that reason and for the sake of consistency. Other than that, some minor nitpicks here and there that you could clean up in a rewrite, but none worth mentioning.
Excellent effort here. Perhaps not horror in a more modern sense, but in the fairy tale context, I think it fits. The gore feels earned and actually has some meaning behind it, which is what makes it effective beyond mere shock value. I took a look at the link in the OP and it seems that you've even succeeded in preserving the meaning of the original tale, which makes the story feel cohesive and thoughtful. An interesting choice of source material makes for icing on the cake.
Very few gripes here. My favorite of the bunch. And with that, I'll stop. For someone who didn't enter, I think I've reached a reasonable quota. Might as well end on a high note.
The Elevator Most Belonging To Alice - Semi Final Bluecat, Runner Up Nashville Inner Journey - Page Awards Finalist - Bluecat semi final Grieving Spell - winner - London Film Awards. Third - Honolulu Ultimate Weapon - Fresh Voices - second place IMDb link... http://www.imdb.com/name/nm7062725/?ref_=tt_ov_wr
This is just a pet peeve, but, you have a classic story with modern phrases set in classic times (like when the sister comments about the space in her head).
It was okay. I could see right away what the father was gonna do. You know, I wish the perfume was magic so that the daughter that everyone thought was pretty was actually ugly.
Usually, Grimm's stories had a message. Not sure what the message is here, except the obvious don't sell your kids, don't wish to be beautiful because people buy you free things.
Perhaps if the person who buys the daughter is ugly, smelly, perverted.... something.
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