I really liked this, some of the character descriptions, dialog, etc. was laugh out loud funny. However, I feel it's still missing a supernatural angle re: the plant.

Perhaps the seed lands in the potting soil and does nothing, then, when Mama has her spasm she falls forward knocking something over in the process. Then, from just that one thing, the room could be this strange Rube Goldberg machine she inadvertently sets in motion till a bottle of 'Miracle Gro' plant food (sitting on a shelf above the plant) gets knocked over and ends up dumping its entire contents onto the seed... just a thought.

This also put me in mind of Scary Movie 2, one of my all time favourite 'bad' movies. The scene when 'Shorty' is accosted by monstrous tree limbs smashing through the window à la Poltergeist, rolled in his bed sheets like a massive doobie... and smoked by the possessed tree.

The ending kind of fell flat for me with the strange twist of fate for Jerome and his Mama... and the plant. None the less, the overall concept was fairly entertaining and, it's definitely a creative twist on the original tale. Well done.

This was such a bizarre little story. There's a lot to like. I thought the characters in particular were handled very well. There’s definitely something here with Jerome risking his mother’s life, getting in bad with the wrong people and having to face the consequences from all sides. But the killer plant thing? That almost seemed like the weirdest subplot ever to a fairly straight forward story. I would've liked some further exploration of it. Why did it grow? What's up with those seeds? Can you smoke it? The way it's played in this script turned it into a really weird deus ex machina. If it had been weaved in better I would've liked this one a lot more.

Well, ahem, a very weird script that surprisingly almost works. The action towards the end seems to be the biggest problem I have with it, and I'm not entirely sure that it follows the fairy tale it's based on as much as the challenge would require.

Good news is that the silly tone works, yet, the script never struck me as using the story to its advantage. The plant growing was outrageous (again, it worked), but it was used as a weak plot point when it should've been the focus of the script. You've got a weed plant that's sentient -- do something with it. It leaves the reader disappointed when instead of progressing through the story with what's been established, we get a shoddy action scene with drug dealers and a fat diabetic having a seizure. Although in saying that, I do think there's definitely something here. Good effort.

Comedy title and a quite weak logline here

I think to know this tale. Cool choice of you. I'm looking forward to what's going on in your script.

It's very over-descriptive imo.

The story never left the comedy field for me. The script partly felt as a construction filled with irony. A fanciful approach but it hasn't fully convinced me.

Some notes.

I am not a fan of pothead stories.  This one didn't quite follow the jack tale, but you did manage to get in a quick growing plant and a giant.  Still, it doesn't work for me.

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Richard

Off jump, I enjoyed the scene with Jerome and Mama. She seemed a bit of a burden on Jerome's end, but he was willing to do the right thing. Now we know the seed is in play, and that it's supposed to payoff later, but after reading I'm not entirely sold on it - but it still makes me think about the relationship between a man and his pot.

Not sure if I was cast for the role of Mama, I'd want to see that in the script lol.

Since Plant had a Little Shop of Horrors vibe, I was trying tune in on that relationship. Jerome never came across overtly dependent or in love with weed, so I never felt any tension toward the end.

Nice writing, and the final ending is solid when plant rolled the pills to Jerome. I think the two thugs didn't land on this, but it could just be Jerome needs a little more affinity for Mary Jane.

Just a bit of explanation here...

Seeing as so many people thought this didn't really follow the fairy tale, Jack and The Beanstalk, let me say I never thought it was required to actually follow the fairy tale. However, let me point out what I did to try and follow the fairy tale that no one seemed to pick up on.

Sugar the drug dealer was 6'8" tall (giant)
Plant was your (Beanstalk)
Qwik had a gold tooth (goose that lays the golden egg)
When Qwik strangle Jerome, he starts to sing a James Taylor song (self playing harp, or stringed instrument as James Taylor plays guitar)
Pills for the weed swap

Well, that's my rationale anway! Thanks for all the reads, and to the two peeps with amazing taste who gave this a first place readers choice vote!!

Also -- LIVINGROOM. Well, yeah, I know they're two words and should be separated. Duh, obviously a typo. And to the commentor who suggested I name the gaming system at the beginning -- if you can tell me how that possibly advances the story forward, or has any relevance, I'd be happy to include it in the future.

And congrats to James!! Great story he wrote.

Steve