The Symbol by Snatch McHappy - Short, Comedy - When a crime occurs, there's only one man who can sniff that shit out... And induce justice of orgasmic proportions. 6 pages - pdf, format

Funny idea, but too over the top for me. If this was my script, I wouldn't want to be in the room when females watch the film. I think the whole idea about HIM is really good, but I guess it gets a little too visual here to be funny any more, at least for me.

Raunchy as hell.

Lol loved the turn this took. Pretty well done with some great lines. A bit of tweaking to add more funny stuff and this is close to gold.

7 laughs out of 10

Snatch,

This has the most humor of the scripts I've read so far.  

It would have been funny if Prince mentioned "aloha" when talking about, "ciao"
Also when Michael Keaton called, if Prince was singing, "tonight we're gonna party like it's 1997.  No that's not it.  1998? No...RING."

I was almost out when the girl started rubbing her groin, but I stayed for the whole thing.

Congratulations.

Jordan

Shouldn't she be getting soft and wet?

This is hilarious, I love the purple rose! Good job! WILHELM SCREAM.

Yes, raunchy as hell.
And my favorite so far.

Great writing and fun from start to finish.

The use of Prince ...very clever

Dirty, disgusting but in humorous  fashion. One of the better scripts for sure.

great job on entering.

Best one so far. Absurd, raunchy, over the top... but definitely funny.

Whilhelm - I thought it's a name and it's an adjective.

So this is a pisser and not a good one cause the story doesn't add up. Although the puddle of water and it is no rain water is a fun detail.

I remember Sussanna- she had orange hair. Good of you to celebrate Prince, I love him as well.

That was good, really good, really full blown raunchy, but really really good. At least one proper laugh per page, well done

A nice pisser homage to Prince. Some funny moments, it goes way OTT in parts but inventive.

-Mark

Good, nice work... this could work on film. I'm wavering between a consider and a rec. Either way, nice job.

Cool premise.

Not sure the lines with the 2s and the U's in them work when spoken - but they're funny as written.

Loved the purple flower in the ending.

Writer,

Well done! Raunchy but didn't rely on it. Funny dialogue delivered well. And good writing too. An easy read that gave me some laughs. One of my favs so far! Good job.

Steve

Nice to have a Prince homage but personally was a little OTT for my personal tastes.

Wel written though.

Dustin,
    Did you write this one?  

It was OTT.  It actually made me slightly uncomfortable.  And that's saying something.  

I can't add much more that was said.  I liked it, not as much as some others, but, it was okay.

7/10

Oh,  did you write this before or after he died?

Dan

Didn't get through it.  Sorry.

Certainly different, so kudos for that.

Like Anthony I came away thinking this was OTT, even for the mighty prince. Wasn't sure exactly what is power was - fly, power, the ability to make a woman's ^&*(€£@ tingle??

Had the opportunity to mix in a few titles, like 'if I was your girlfriend' since this is all about prince

Quite liked the flower, but the sleigh passed me by as to what was funny.

All the best

Snatch McHappy,

Didn't do a lot for me. Didn't really find it funny or particularly interesting. Well written though, just not my cuppa T.

Glenn.

Right, think I'm needing a shower. Was a bit OTT but the raunchiness seemed to be an incorporation in to the script as opposed to in your face porn.

Clever wit and good writing. Nice job

One of my last few...and received a PM to check this one out, so I'll try and be as detailed as possible.  Uh Oh...is that a god thing or a bad thing?  We'll see...

Starts out like a good writer is writing a pisser...but not trying to write poorly - as in the "pisser" parts will be the words and style chosen.

The intro of Ashley appears to be written seriously, but IMO, there is a problem that I see so often and just don't understand why writers keep doing this.  Ashley is intro'd in a "sentence" that's not a sentence,a s there's no verb and nothing happening.  The following sentence should be included to this intro with a simple comma.  It reads and looks so much better.

Ha! The thug passage is humorous, even though I'm not sure it's meant to be.  If they're wearing ski masks, how could anyone have a clue how old they are?  Also, love the line about 1 of the thugs only having his wits.  LOL!!

If she's deaf and the thugs have ski masks on, could she really see their mouths move to read their lips?  Funny, though!

"oriental shorthair in heat" - HA!  Hilarious!

LOL!!!!  Pretty frickin' hilarious!!!!

WILHELM SCREAM - LOL!!!  Funny shit...

"orgasmic juices" - Damn, bro...this is killing me!!!

"CLOSE ON: Prince's nostrils flaring."  Fuck...you're killing me!!  Haven't laughed this hard since last weekend when my girlfriend and I downed 2 bottles of Jagie in 1 day.

Almost every line is gold here.  Love the use of letters.  Love the hilarious dialogue.  Love the Susanna Hoffs ref.  Damn, man, fucking A!!!

Flashback is funny.  Insert is funny.  Dialogue is hysterical.

Love the ending, too.  Just am not a big fan of some of the action description writing on the last page.

My favorite so far by a country mile.  Hell of an effort and a great, funny tribute to Prince.

Either you like it or you don't, I'm going to have to go with the later, written well and all it just not my type of comedy.

I thought this was really funny; pretty much every line hit the nail. Not much else to say other than this one tickled my pink (or should that be purple?) lol.

I didn't find this nearly as funny as some of the others here.  A crazy tribute to a great performer, but somehow this story didn't follow through on the promise of the premise.  Prince as a purple crime fighting avenging angel is a hilarious idea, I just think it deserved a more imaginative execution.  

After seeing all these interviews the past few days with people that knew Prince, turns out the one thing he absolutely never did was curse, so that aspect would need to be revised.  Anyway, looks like someone had a lot of fun writing this and a lot of people seem to like it, so that's a good thing.

This story wasn't for me because of several reasons. It seems others liked it, so what…

With so much buildup, especially the emphasis on Ashley's reaction, I thought you could only be setting yourself up to fail with whoever this character might be... until Prince showed up. Indeed I think he's one of the few personas who could spontaneously elicit a puddle of... non-rainwater. After that, it gets pretty ridiculous... and still works solely because it's Prince. The Wilhelm Scream included (could've so easily been a stock gag).

Not my kind of humor, but somehow this won me over. On the one hand, it seems like a very fun, heartfelt tribute to a fallen legend. On the other hand... Prince was fucking nuts... like, not in touch with reality. None of what happens seems over the top in that context. It almost seems like an experiment to take Prince's larger-than-life world and focus it into a coherent through line, without compromising the madness.

...I don't even like Prince, so kudos.

Okay, so I'm almost through reading most of the scripts. And for now I'm putting this at number one. I liked this one the most. It seems to meet all the rules and it made me laugh the most.

I didn't get the "Tuesday, no Wednesday"-joke. If it was one.

I like it.

Ha! Very good. The whole puddle thing makes me think it could only work as animation, so that’s how I imagined it and it came out very well. The only thing I don’t get is what Prince has against Jack Nicholson. Change that out for something that makes sense and this thing’s airtight, OTT fun.

Well, seeing as everyone's doing it...  

Haha Steve, that was a proper filthy laugh. Well in mate, great tribute to the wee man. It's got a really good laugh to page ratio too.

You going to expand it? The new adventures of Prince and his instruments of love?

I might expand a couple things I had to cut to make this fit. There was some additional dialogue and stuff, but nothing major. I think this originally topped out at 7 pages.

And... In case anyone was wondering -- this was written two days BEFORE Prince died! So, it wasn't meant to be an homage. Another writer, who wishes to remain anonymous, suggested what a fine superhero Prince might make. I took it from there. Had a lot of fun writing this.

Nice Job.
    I know I had asked whether or not this was written before he died.

Remind me not to have you write something about me, just in case you're like a death portent seer or something...

Nice work Steven. Some real talent on show with this one.

Def one of my Rec's.. Great job!

DanC - yeah, I remember you asking whether it was written before or after. When I found out he died my jaw dropped. I thought it was gonna kill this script, but enough folks seemed to like it. Funny how polarizing this one was.

Dustin - thanks mate! I've always felt that these challenges can bring out the best in us. I've had a clunker or two, but for the most part been very happy with the quality of my OWC's.

Chris - thanks! Glad it worked for you.

Another funny thing... The Ashley character was actually based on a real person. A number of years ago I was hanging with this girl who brought her friend over. We're having a few drinks and all when Prince comes on the radio. This girl goes on and on about how sexually charged Prince's music makes her feel. Suddenly, the look on her face changes, her eyes gloss over and she's literally squirming on the couch. All this as my friend and I exchange bemused glances. It was quite a moment in time.

Great script Bro... A lot of laughs

Quoted from SAC DanC - yeah, I remember you asking whether it was written before or after. When I found out he died my jaw dropped. I thought it was gonna kill this script, but enough folks seemed to like it. Funny how polarizing this one was. Dustin - thanks mate! I've always felt that these challenges can bring out the best in us. I've had a clunker or two, but for the most part been very happy with the quality of my OWC's. Chris - thanks! Glad it worked for you. Another funny thing... The Ashley character was actually based on a real person. A number of years ago I was hanging with this girl who brought her friend over. We're having a few drinks and all when Prince comes on the radio. This girl goes on and on about how sexually charged Prince's music makes her feel. Suddenly, the look on her face changes, her eyes gloss over and she's literally squirming on the couch. All this as my friend and I exchange bemused glances. It was quite a moment in time.

So, did the girl go into ecstasy or have a seizure?  I got lost...

Actually, yeah, I had wondered when you wrote it.  It was kinda a fitting tribute to the man who was larger then life.  I didn't care for his later stuff, but, some of his earlier stuff was really good.  I think each person could find something they liked.  Even a metalhead like me could enjoy stuff like "Let's go Crazy" or Purple Rain...

I had wondered when you wrote it b/c he died like the last day before the deadline and my first thought was, if you wrote this after he died, wow, what a concept with very little time to write it.

It was a fun read.  

Can't believe he's gone.  Can't believe how much insanity follows his lack of a will.

Dan