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Probably the most unique story of this OWC. The problem is that everything just seemed random, it didn't seem like there was a coherent story we were following.
Well this was different, at least it didn't spend the entire time in a taxi, actually barely any of it. Had a few laugh out loud moments, although it bounced around with quite a few characters to keep track off.
Now that tugged at my Scottish funny bone. It was well written, had properly humerous bits and it all worked for me. Scrappy was a great character too, randy animals always lend a topping to the comedic pizza.
Big problem is that in my opinion it completely missed the trapped in a taxi brief, which is a shame as it really was one of my favourites so far.
Not exactly trapped in a cab. I was expecting at least a fresh take on a classic joke, but this just left me baffled. The humping dog, the wooden leg, murderous red heads -- there's too little to connect it all. The whole taxi angle seems like an afterthought.
Sorry, wide of the mark for me.
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So was a taxi in any of it? They called a cab at the end of page 9. I didnt notice the trap part either.
Some of the dialog was entertaining. As I finished the story I kept thinking what it was about. I don't seem to figure out. But I liked Bill and the story he told. If only it had a point.
This one definitely had some funny moments, although it did seem like it was "geared" to a couple certain SS members, which kinda makes it an inside joke script. Still, there were a couple lol moments in here.
However, no attempt (well, a small one) was made to even adhere to the challenge rules "trapped" in a cab. Just seems like a writer was having a bit of fun -- over a beer or two!!
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I thought this was trying a little too hard to be funny. Some of the jokes were a bit forced and despite being short, the characters blended together a bit.
Kudos on the names though, thought Jason (Sterling) might just wander around the pub aimlessly before giving away his pint lol.
Anyway, not bad but I think personally it missed the mark a little.
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Well, you got me! I read all the way to the end waiting for someone to at least be inside a taxi. Tried to hard to be funny but wasn't (to me). Only funny bit was coming out of the bathroom and saying they were out of toilet paper, but that can't carry this waste of my time. Sorry. Not for me.
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This was pretty good as a stand alone script. A few good laughs and such. But it didn't meet the criteria for me. There was a taxi, but no one was trapped in it. A good effort but it comes up short on that.