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But the reason I'd like to go into 15 pages is because most people complained that my script had no witches in the first 10 pages.
I took the challenge as writing the first 10 pages of a feature than will contain "witches in the 20th century." I didn't want to go with the broomstick wielding, wart-nosed, evil beings they are known for. My feature would involve witchcraft or at least the attempt of witchcraft, but it's slightly more based on reality and those things don't happen within the first 10 pages. I just hint at my character's intentions.
I didn't think the challenge meant that I had to have a witch in the first 10 pages, but it seems a lot of proverbial "points" we're deducted from mine because of that.
When the writers are officially announced I can go more in depth with where I planned on going with my story, but you can figure out which one I did from these comments.
There's also another huge hint that was completely accidental.
'Artist' is not a term you should use to refer to yourself. Let others, and your work, do it for you.
In Felipe's defense, I have to say that I agree with where he's coming from.
For instance, in one of my all time favorite movies, "The Descent", which is obviously about a cave, there is no cave or mention of a cave in the first 10 pages or minutes.
Interesting comment from Felipe, and I do agree that although his script has some issues, it does seem to have some potential legs for a feature, where most did not - and I'm looking at you, top 2 vote getters!!!
I do think 15 pages can give a better indication. Some stories need a little room to build. But no more than 15. If nothing interesting has happened by then, it ain't gonna get off the ground. No runway is that long.
Felipe makes a fair point about the witch.
My script is a short, and it was added by Don that shorts were allowed for this challenge. But if someone didn't vote for it on that basis, I have no problem at all with that. I'm just happy people read it, and some liked it.
I am considering making it a feature. But this is not the first 10 pages. More like the last 10. There you go, how bout a last 10 pages challenge? lol. I like writing endings. And I like happy endings(giggety giggety).
I think Blood is clearly a feature. Can't say about whether it has the legs until we know the rest of the story, but why not? You have a protag trying to hide her power, in conflict with her mother, and desperate to save her family. Sounds like a feature to me.
There's a good reason for having the limit set at 10 pages. In those first ten pages, we'd better know what we're in for, period. What sort of world we're being introduced to, an idea of the rules of that world, the tone that will carry through the movie, the characters we're going to spend the next 90+ minutes with. If it's a story about witches, I don't need to see a witch anywhere in those first 10 pages but there had better be something supernatural or at least a good foreshadowing of the witchery to come.
Movies like The Descent can get away with holding out because it's right there in the title. You know what you're in for before stepping foot in the theatre. If you want to call your movie The Witches Of Eastwick, you don't have to have an iota of witchery in the first twenty minutes (and it doesn't, not obviously anyway) because it's right in the title and we know right off the bat those characters are the witches in question.
The first 10 pages, and by extension the first 10 minutes, of any feature sets the reader/audience expectations. You don't do yourself any favours by holding out to build the suspense.