Nice work. I got the comedy. I thought it worked well. Typos... P.3 - ‘Sweet’ instead of sweat. P.6 - ‘Floor board’ is this supposed to be dash board? P.7 - ‘The car speeds down the road like greased lightening’ P.10 - ‘She places the knife back in her cloths’ instead of clothes. The chase sequence was the strongest aspect to this short for me. Lou |