This is great. I don't have much complaints except maybe showing Alex finding the book and opening it. That will set his curiosity more.

Other than, good 10pgs.


Gabe

I haven't had time to read into the OWC (and my entry shows the lack of time lol) so only managed to take in a couple. I had to give this a read due to its popularity and was glad I did.  I deffinitely want to read more of this! It's a blast!
Awesome foreshadowing as to the kid's later involvement.

The genre was a little unclear, it is reading like horror, the logline would suggest so.
The scientist that giggles when Jane mentions witchcraft; these scientists have already heard lots of claims and wouldn't be entertained by someone claiming to be a witch, probably tired of it by now, plus it came across as unprofessional so I'd take the giggle out (perhaps swap it for a roll of the eyes to understate the skepticism if it's important to story to show the character's derision),

Well done

Excellent.  Just plain Excellent.  Not sure if this would be a full length script, but I certainly like these ten pages.  Not a single problem with any aspect of the writing.  It is all clear and concise.  Her demonstration of her powers then demanding the check was terrific!

First ten pages, yes. Yet I want the stakes to be higher for what she is stepping out for. Losing the home is passe. Set a higher bar.

Within the story there is the tragedy and I like how the mother goes after the challenge. But now ask what happens after she gets the check. There is your second and third act. Lots to cover with this set up.

Good, but set the bar higher.