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Welcome to the October 2018 7 Week Challenge. That's right; seven weeks, not one. Yes, I know that's one of the mainstays of the site is that we always have a horror OWC in October. Whether or not this one turns out well, this will be the only time and I'll make it up to you next time if I haven't been run off the site.
The theme is a golden oldie: Night Gallery. This horror show of the late 1960s (Night Gallery, for anyone who needs a refresher course or is learning about it for the first time) focused on a gallery in its wraparound segments, where it introduced paintings which depicted images related to the plots of the stories.
Now, while I call this the Night Gallery 7WC, it's only meant to be a guide. For your feature scripts, you should create your own Curator, your own paintings and your own original stories. Your feature should contain an introduction sequence, three to five vignettes and a finale for the wraparound (if you would like. The finale is optional).
In addition to all of this, all the stories should be horror derivatives. This means that any kind of horror script is eligible.
I hope you have fun and enjoy yourselves and... if you don't, send all your hate mail to me and I'll be happy to refund you. Good luck, everyone.
T-minus seven weeks until your 7WC script is due.
Topic: Night Gallery. Genre: Horror (and its sub-genres).
You have seven weeks to write a screenplay of greater than 75 pages. The screenplay must be properly formatted and in PDF format. The scripts are due on Friday, November 2nd at 11:59PM EST and must be submitted to: SimplyScripts.com/7wc.
There will be a Review Page E-mailed to you for you to score the scripts you read. Please only give scores to scripts that you have read.
Timeline:
September 14th at 10:00PM EST - Theme and Genre announced.
November 2nd at 11:59PM EST - Scripts are due.
November 16th at 5:00PM EST - Names and results revealed.
The Rules:
Your script must be a feature length screenplay, done in the style of the TV series, Night Gallery, with between 3-5 horror vignettes and be a minimum of 75 pages long.
Please do not give a score inside the actual script review. Instead, wait until the scorecard is given out. Thank you.
Jargon:
75 or more pages.
Properly formatted & saved as a PDF file.
This isn't a contest. There are no prizes.
Free to submit.
One entry per person.
No pissers, please.
You can revise your script as many times as you wish up until 11:59PM EST on November 2nd.
Participants are strongly encouraged to read and comment/review on the scripts submitted.
Do not put your real name on your script. However, please use your real name when submitting your script. (After the challenge closes you can either have your script removed or resubmit with your script with your name on it.
Please put ｩ on the bottom left corner of your title page.
Best of luck and I hope you guys have a lot of fun with this contest.
I知 in. Even if my script is shit, I知 in. I need to write something so bad.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Night gallery is a rod sterling show. Kind of a spin off from twilight zone.
I guess this is a replacement of the one week challenge we normally have.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
"The Fibonacci Sequence occurs in many places in nature, so many in fact that some suspect the hand of a Higher Power. Or, perhaps, a darker Power is at work?"
Now, while I call this the Night Gallery 7WC, it's only meant to be a guide.
For your feature scripts, you should create your own Curator, your own paintings and your own original stories. Your feature should contain an introduction sequence, three to five vignettes and a finale for the wraparound (if you would like. The finale is optional).
In addition to all of this, all the stories should be horror derivatives. This means that any kind of horror script is eligible.
But if I do recall correctly, these contests are usually open to interpretation. lol.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Ah. I'm currently writing the second draft of a feature I'm hoping to enter into several competitions soon, so I'm out. I'd have time for a short owc but not to write another feature. Best of luck to all who enter.
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Let's see if we can clear it up one step at a time.
The show, Night Gallery, had a set-up where we were introduced to a gallery which had macabre paintings that went along with what you'd see in the story that came after it. The host, Rod Serling, would introduce three paintings per episode and each painting had a story attached to it.
For your feature-length script, you're doing the same set-up: a host will introduce between three and five paintings (if you do three, I would expect them to be between roughly 22-30 pages each while five would put you closer to 15-20 pages each).
Each story will have the introduction to the painting before it begins and when the story is resolved, we will go back to the gallery to introduce another story.
Here is an example of what the intros were like, but remember, you're not recreating the show, you're creating one of your own.
Does the setup have to be exactly like the show or can it be a different interpretation that accomplishes the same thing? Specifically, do we have to break the fourth wall for the intros?
Does the setup have to be exactly like the show or can it be a different interpretation that accomplishes the same thing? Specifically, do we have to break the fourth wall for the intros?
Same, but different is a fair approach. I called it the Night Gallery 7WC to put an image in your head, not to say that it should be recreated verbatim.
I like this challenge. It's a compilation of 3-5 short horror stories. Each about 20-25 pages long. And they have a painting that sums up the story that we show at the beginning.
So now I have to come up with 3-5 short horror stories and think of a poster for each one.
Cool.
I even signed up for a free trial of Hulu to watch some episodes since I'm not familiar with the series.
The series isn't very good, nowhere near as good as The Twilight Zone was.
I like the challenge too. For me, the real challenge is time. I'm currently writing another film for a friend to shoot. I'm not sure I'll be able to do this too, but I'm inspired. I've already come up with the framing device and trying to decide if I should follow a theme or something else to link the stories together.
I知 going to give this a shot precisely because horror is well outside my comfort zone, but no promises that anyone else will ever get to see it if it turns out to be a steaming pile of poo.
I like this challenge. It's a compilation of 3-5 short horror stories. Each about 20-25 pages long. And they have a painting that sums up the story that we show at the beginning.
So now I have to come up with 3-5 short horror stories and think of a poster for each one.
Cool.
I even signed up for a free trial of Hulu to watch some episodes since I'm not familiar with the series.
-Jordan
To help retain your sanity, the length of your stories should likely be paced relative to the number of them. If you do five stories, you probably don't want each one to be 25 pages, if you know what I mean. Something to consider.
The series isn't very good, nowhere near as good as The Twilight Zone was.
I like the challenge too. For me, the real challenge is time. I'm currently writing another film for a friend to shoot. I'm not sure I'll be able to do this too, but I'm inspired. I've already come up with the framing device and trying to decide if I should follow a theme or something else to link the stories together.
Not a big fan of the show, myself. While TZ felt timeless (and is one of my personal favorites), NG felt dated, but I always loved the set-ups, the paintings.
Look at this from another point of view. Give the challenge a shot. If you "fail", upload the shorts you did complete into the Shorts section as their own thing.
To help retain your sanity, the length of your stories should likely be paced relative to the number of them. If you do five stories, you probably don't want each one to be 25 pages, if you know what I mean. Something to consider.
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The format of the show seemed to be for two stories to pull the weight of the show, with two-thirds of the time spent on those two stories. The other two or three stories were much shorter, almost filler between the big ones. Same could be done here, but I'm more inclined to have them weighted more equally, or make the last one the longest as a sort of climax. Then again, maybe the climax is the shortest for impact.
That sounds like another out of the box fun challenge from you, Sean. I don't know if I will participate as it's a time consuming challenge. But it's fun. but time consuming. but fun
That sounds like another out of the box fun challenge from you, Sean. I don't know if I will participate as it's a time consuming challenge. But it's fun. but time consuming. but fun
I refuse to make things easy for everyone out there in SimplyScripts land. That said, I gave you an out with this one. Give it a shot. If you finish the feature, great. If you don't finish the feature, you probably still wrote one or two short horror scripts you can upload to the site independently. =)
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Odd thing. IUt just occured tome the logline to this is gonna be a pain in the butt to write.
"A curator shows us four different stories of the macabre" Looks easy enough, until you know that's pretty lame. and it might just be the same log as five other entries.
Jordan, that's basically the premise of the whole thing, so unless I've missed something, why back to the drawing board?
I'm not partaking btw, just commenting.
Edit: Ah, okay, you mean logline. I expect they'll all be similar. Although you could sub each different story with a logline and the type of horror, be it body-horror, psychological horror etc.
Jordan, that's basically the premise of the whole thing, so unless I've missed something, why back to the drawing board?
I'm not partaking btw, just commenting.
Edit: Ah, okay, you mean logline. I expect they'll all be similar. Although you could sub each different story with a logline and the type of horror, be it body-horror, psychological horror etc.
I think that one might have gone over your head, Libby
I'm already working on a project just like this... only there isn't a museum or a curator, my shorts must relate to each other in some way. It's also not a spec so way more important. I'm also working on lots of other stuff so don't have time for this.
Good luck to everyone that does enter. Sounds like a good one. Shorts being put into anthologies seems to be something directors are looking for these days. The guys I'm working with are eyeing a distribution deal so there must be demand for them from viewers too.
Bummer. I like the OWC cause they allow me to get in and get out without too much investment. But a 75 pager is too much for me. I don't have that time. Good luck to all. Try to scare me.
I'm pretty sure I won't be in either. I must prioritize the feature I'm already working on. A OWC, I maybe could have squeezed in, but as much as I've been wanting to do a 7WC, the timing sucks.
Good luck to all, I look forward to reading, assuming I have time for that...
About the challenge, I swear I had a fully formed idea what I was going to write about and I forgot it all. I'm trying and trying to recall but my mind went blank. This is stranger than strange.
Im a couple days late to seeing this but i already have some ideas. My humanities degree is finally working in my favor! lol. I need to check out a couple episodes of the show to understand how they are supposed to all wrap around in the finale.
About the challenge, I swear I had a fully formed idea what I was going to write about and I forgot it all. I'm trying and trying to recall but my mind went blank. This is stranger than strange.
Sounds like you should write about a device that erases people's...uh...um...
I thought it was, too, simply because OWC's are. The last 7WC was way before my time, but Sean clued me in that they typically aren't anonymous to help keep authors motivated to actually finish.
Haven't seen any official ruling on this particular Challenge.
Do not put your real name on your script. However, please use your real name when submitting your script. (After the challenge closes you can either have your script removed or resubmit with your script with your name on it.
This challenge is Sean's. He sets the rules. In the past, when we've done 6 or 7WC, the purpose has been to inspire and help writers to finish a feature. For some, that's an achievement in itself. Anonymity has not been needed, rather everyone was encouraged to ask others for help if they get stuck or have other issues. IMHO, that is important since in those challenges out of 12 or so people taking part, only about half actually manage to complete their feature. This might be easier though, since it seems you're basically writing a few shorts you string together.
There has been some good scripts coming out of these challenges though. After a few re-writes, some of them have gone on to be sold and/or produced.
One other neat feature of an anthology-style challenge is a pair of writers could assemble their respective best pieces into a collaborative feature after the challenge.
Not sure how likely that is to actually happen, but it痴 possible.
I've been brainstorming more story ideas. Kinda hard to talk about when it's supposed to be anonymous.
That was in error as I copied and pasted my rules set-up from an old OWC. In the 7WC, your names, scripts and identities can be made public, so you can get advice and all that good stuff on your scripts. That was an oversight on my part.
I thought it was, too, simply because OWC's are. The last 7WC was way before my time, but Sean clued me in that they typically aren't anonymous to help keep authors motivated to actually finish.
Haven't seen any official ruling on this particular Challenge.
This challenge is Sean's. He sets the rules. In the past, when we've done 6 or 7WC, the purpose has been to inspire and help writers to finish a feature. For some, that's an achievement in itself. Anonymity has not been needed, rather everyone was encouraged to ask others for help if they get stuck or have other issues. IMHO, that is important since in those challenges out of 12 or so people taking part, only about half actually manage to complete their feature. This might be easier though, since it seems you're basically writing a few shorts you string together.
I made the rules, but forgot to make that change beforehand. I would love for everyone to get advice from others in order to improve the quality and scope of your scripts. This is not supposed to be private.
What gives you the right to run this show? This isn't your rodeo so you better just keep your big mouth shut!
You know it really chaps my hide when know-it-all people like you try to push your dogma on the rest of us. If I only knew where you lived I'd give you a piece of my mind.
Glad to see it's not anonymous! Sean and his mistakes...
I'm toying with the idea of a snake fable but not sure if it's good enough. I don't know if I should tell the story here. Would it be like an ethical thing to do at all? I want to know if I should even think about it. And I want to get an honest answer. But will there be an honest answer. So, two questions: if it's okay to post the exact story, a short synopsis of a sort. And if I'll get an honest answer whether it's funny (as opposed to fun and entertaining) or good.
No, comedy horror - I love those, but I shouldn't try. I know how that one will end up for me. I want to write straight-up horror but fearing the idea is laughable. I mean that in a bad sense.
Here it is.
There's a sort of snake in Azerbaijan, cold gurza. They say they are born in 7 and if you ever kill one of them, its brothers and sisters will revenge. Surely they are not born in 7, they are egg born, it can be any amount. And snakes do not live in 7, they don't have brothers and sisters and that's just a fable. But there's this boy, whose sister died from gurza's bite. Then he learns that his Dad killed a gurza when they were little. He starts fearing for his own life. So, one of the shorts is them in their teens and his sister dying. Another - his father leaving them and gets run over by a car. --it's all arrange by a gurza. That's when he learns his father killed gurza. Next short - he grows up, sees gurza, his friend tells him about gurza and how they are born in 7(this part makes me laugh a bit. What about you?). Gurzas start following him. He kills a gurza. A gurza kills his friend. I have to think two other shorts through.
UGh. Can't we just write our own horror feature? Asking everyone to write a feature based on this is crazy.. it take a lot of mental effort... a short anyone can write in a few hours.. but a feature takes a lot
As long as you avoid planes and Sam Jackson, you should be fine. Snakes can go either way. A saw a snake movie in the 90s that was in the same vein as Arachnophobia. Scared the shit out of me. Might have been the made-for-TV Rattled (1996).
As for my script, I'm wondering if the following ideas suit anyone's fancy:
Jaws meets The Wolfman meets 12 Angry Men. A jury can't agree on a verdict for a man who was bitten by a shark, became a shark-man, and bit/ate/killed a bunch of people. This one turned out quite short.
I'm currently writing a vignette about an obsessed audiophile who suddenly becomes deaf and decides to cut off people's ears to replace his own and continue his vinyl record hobby. It's better than it sounds, and I'm quite confident in it so far. But am I the only one who thinks the premise works?
I have to say my second vignette is the strongest so far. It's a retelling of the classic urban legend, "The Babysitter and the Man Upstairs."
Other ideas I've brainstormed:
A bloody retelling of Little Red Riding Hood done in the style of an R-rated Chuck Jones cartoon. An homage to Tales From the Crypt's "The Third Pig."
A horror version of The Odd Couple. Can two murderers share an apartment without killing each other? I don't have much faith in this one, to be honest.
Chris, I didn't understand the Jaws meets The Wolfman meets 12 Angry Men. I mean how do these all meet at all? Rhetoric, you don't have to answer. But the last one - The Odd Couple about two killers - this really made me excited. This could be super good. But you've got to make it a bit funny though, no?
I'm not sure about snakes now. I want something very low-budget. Snakes woudn't be perhaps.
@Dena, if I submit mine and one of us writes something that doesn't fit the challenge exactly I'd still read his script. But that person has to be one of us - we know we start from scratch and that means the same time and effort goes into your script as it does in mine. Outsiders perhaps might misunderstand and submit what they already have - and for that reason I wouldn't be sure if I'd read their script if it doesn't fit the challenge. Curious to see what Sean says to that. He makes mistakes lately.
Kham, I think the snake fable sounds really interesting and potentially horrific and scary. I like country of origin scary myths come true.
Most people are scared of snakes, or have a healthy fear of them, so that's always good fodder for horror.
Btw, we have regular visits from Diamond Pythons in our back yard that are freakishly huge - but pretty harmless, and Water Dragons swimming in our pool. Boring looking Brown snakes and Red-Belly blacks are the lethal ones in our neck of the woods.
Anyway, your idea sounds like a 'trilogy of terror' - three tales surrounding the same subject matter as opposed to separate but linking horror tales. Nothing wrong with that, in my book.
Just finished watching the Night Gallery story called: Eyes. A rich blind woman gets a new pair of eyes that allow her to see for only one brief ironic moment.
Starred Joan Crawford, and directed by Steven Spielberg.
Most people are scared of snakes, or have a healthy fear of them, so that's always good fodder for horror.
Seems that things with a very different body plan (snakes, spiders, tentacle monsters, etc.) or things that attack unseen (sharks, microbes, telekinetics, etc.) make for good horror fodder.
You'd think these guys have no character or personality then bam - Zombieland is out followed by Warm Bodies, and both are so great. Time for another one.
There's a sort of snake in Azerbaijan, cold gurza. They say they are born in 7 and if you ever kill one of them, its brothers and sisters will revenge.
This sounds great! You could almost do 7 shorts, one for each snake. Or just change the myth a little to 5 snakes and go from there.
You should stay as close to the myth as possible though, as that will bring an air or authenticity to the stories.
Whether I'm in or out, I feel like I have to comment here, as it seems to me peeps are completely missing Sean's concept.
Night Gallery is completely based on pictures/paintings/sculptures of creepy things in "The Night Gallery" and then shorts based around those pieces of art.
So, for Chris' idea, are you seriously going to start with a picture of a shark or sharkman? Really?
Kham's idea, are you going to have a picture of a Gurza snake...or 7 Gurzas?
I understand peeps are trying to come up with stories first, but to me, this is actually backasswards. Come up with a picture...give it a title, and then formulate your story.
I have definitely been keeping the artworks in mind for my vignettes. For the one that I have written out, it wasn't too hard to come up with nearly parallel images to start and end the story.
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FAVOR: The painting 鄭 Moment of Reflection depicts a young Caucasian woman in an 1890s high-collared, puffy-shouldered dress applying lip color with a brush. She peers into a mirror with a frame of elaborately sculpted frosted glass.
Her reflection is splattered in blood and holds a curved blade of some sort, also bloodied, in the same position as the lip brush.
DISSOLVE TO:
Not sure I'm going to be able to keep that up through all of the vignettes, though.
I understand peeps are trying to come up with stories first, but to me, this is actually backasswards. Come up with a picture...give it a title, and then formulate your story.
Cart - Horse. Horse - Cart.
I guess it depends on which way you're going. Either way will work, but I see what you're saying, Jeff.
Thinking along those lines, here's a website that creates random images:
I'm pretty sure I won't have time for this. Dena and I are shooting two films in a couple of weeks then I'm off for a few days to DW for the Food & Wine Festival and MNSSH party. I know. I'm childish.
If I do write something, it will be based on Dante's Inferno. Most likely using Gustave Dore's pictures.
PS: Since this is a horror challenge, I would suggest Googling horror art or macabre art for inspiration.
Jeff, I've been coming up with the basic story ideas first and then a strong image before I write a single word. I've even gone one further by evoking a specific artist or style for each painting.
As for the sharkman thing, it was the first vignette idea that popped into my head. It's a B idea, but it has good potential for practical effects and makeup. I'm a sucker for B movies anyway. I might either move it to later in the script and be filler
OR
branch it off and make it it's own script, then replace it with a better story for my Morgue Museum. I'll just see what happens.
Oh, so it's about paintings. I just read the requirements closely - Sean wants a Curator and all.
Well, it's too little time left anyway. I guess I'm out. Too bad, or Jordan came up with something good regarding the snakes and I started thinking of using it... when I had to read the rest of you, guys. I'd better stay in oblivion and write something.
I don't think it matters which round about way you come up with your story - painting first to inspire, story, then painting - linking with a theme. It doesn't have to be a famous artwork either. You could get a friend to do the artwork. As long as it's creepy.
I just watched a couple of EPs of Night Gallery and the important thing is the story be strong in horror. Serling uses the painting as Intro and stepping off point, that's all. Just a way of evoking a sinister mood while he does a little opening spiel much like he did in Twilight Zone.
In fact, if you look at that episode there's a painting of a creepy old house, then Stirling moves to a different canvas, throws a red cloth to reveal what's underneath as a way of cutting to the film, an aerial of New York and drifting down to cars travelling along a Fifth Avenue street.
I already got my stories. Just need to put it down on paper.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
"you create your own art and you create your own stories"
the series did that everytime, to invent a new story and picture. And you said the challenge also demands the curator introduction. So, no bullshit, give me an example to understand.
edit: That's what you were saying about the intro:
"The host, Rod Serling, would introduce three paintings per episode and each painting had a story attached to it.
For your feature-length script, you're doing the same set-up: a host will introduce between three and five paintings.
I can稚 tell you the right way to make the setup your own, but I can tell you how I did it in my current draft.
Instead of a museum or traditional gallery, I have some eccentric old-money gazillionaire who patronizes artists. The 田urator is showing the new batch of artists the ropes by explaining some of the pieces made by the artists before them.
At this point it is still pretty half-baked as a wraparound, but already it痴 not the same as the TV show.
Hey Frank, that actually sounds cool. The rich investor guy brings a lot of mystery in I guess, and possibly keeps his own plans and motives for himself for a while.
So, in this vague outline of a concept you would chop off that whole fourth wall breaking element of the curator and go with live action?
Instead of a generic art gallery, I'm going with specific galleries and having the curator stroll through them describing paintings.
If given more time, I'd actually find a real painting in each gallery and create a story around it.
It sounds like people are too hung up on the curator and intro part.
The "Curator" could be at:
Google Images. It could be at an auction. It could be some kids drawings in 1st grade. It could be at a storage unit auction.
Just think of places where any...and I mean ANY drawing/painting/sketch/etching/woodworking, or some other form of artwork might reside, and go from there.
Yeah, there's a lot of space as you describe it, Jordan.
So, in your opinion the curator could be a kid that explains his pictures to the classmates?
Okay fine. Fourth wall breaking curator walks around and pulls off dustsheets from paintings - introduction isn't a must. Check.
I could also imagine a story could make more sense if the curator appears after the story's exposition. And the paintings are introduced and evolve in act 2. Not sure if this is in the sense of the challenge though. The classic intro would be some adolescents walking into the creepy mansion a la Rocky Horror Picture Show first. And then they start to find the dangerous shit, know what I mean...?
I also think in the end, "for my take", the actual plot should after all be more important than the paintings' story segments.
Will be back tonight, for some more thoughts if someone likes to chat further. I think I got a first idea.
So, in your opinion the curator could be a kid that explains his pictures to the classmates?
I was going to have Virgil in a big city where Dore's pictures of the inferno would be graffiti. IMHO, I think it would be a bad idea to stick too close to the old TV series. Isn't it supposed to be your own take on this?
I was going to have Virgil in a big city where Dore's pictures of the inferno would be graffiti. IMHO, I think it would be a bad idea to stick too close to the old TV series. Isn't it supposed to be your own take on this?
Haha. All right.
I actually would try it with a collaboration this time, so if anybody wants, just contact me, you are very welcome.
What I offer:
I like mystery, jump scare Horror although of course intelligent in backhand-- the rest of Horror I mostly don't know and have no feel for. And that's what I want to deliver right here, then, don't get me wrong, it's a vague impression and wish that I even will write some letters on a sheet for this one. A motivated partner might help. And I want it if you like. I think those movies, I discribed feeling wise, are justified and feel relaxing.
To get more definite:
The feeling of my first idea is, chamber play.
There's one room. Four walls of concrete, cubicle structure.
We find characters who wake up in that room.
Each of the four walls has one painting on them.
The curator is the villain who talks via loudspeaker to our characters.
Our characters have some guilt to pay. My/our movie should be fun to watch with some popcorn, but still it should be intelligent as a whole.
Hey Frank, that actually sounds cool. The rich investor guy brings a lot of mystery in I guess, and possibly keeps his own plans and motives for himself for a while.
So, in this vague outline of a concept you would chop off that whole fourth wall breaking element of the curator and go with live action?
That's the idea. The curator's exposition would be valid dialogue to characters actually interested in what he's saying.
A pet peeve of mine is how the exposition in sci-fi can get a little thick ("Thank you, Bob, for reminding me how to perform this process that I've done several times a day for years because it's, you know, my job."), so although this curator will come off a bit lecture-ish, it should still feel realistic. The new artists can also break up the lecture a bit by reacting.
Not claiming to break new theatrical ground here, of course. It's just the new-guy-who-needs-everything-explained trope, hopefully executed in a non-annoying way.
A pet peeve of mine is how the exposition in sci-fi can get a little thick ("Thank you, Bob, for reminding me how to perform this process that I've done several times a day for years because it's, you know, my job."), so although this curator will come off a bit lecture-ish, it should still feel realistic. The new artists can also break up the lecture a bit by reacting.
Not claiming to break new theatrical ground here, of course. It's just the new-guy-who-needs-everything-explained trope, hopefully executed in a non-annoying way.
imo you're too much into that stuff. Can you explain easier and more understandable;;; no offence, Frank.
imo you're too much into that stuff. Can you explain easier and more understandable;;; no offence, Frank.
I don't want to derail the thread. Just type "as you know bob" into your favorite search engine. The trope is most common when how-things-work-around-here need to be explained to the audience. This could be technobabble in a sci-fi story, or why the cops don't do something bloody obvious in a crime drama.
Fortunately for my wraparound concept, having an artsy-type explaining art to other artsy-types is something that actually happens. I just need to avoid him telling them Art 101 stuff, which should be easy enough.
Just type "as you know bob" into your favorite search engine. The trope is most common when how-things-work-around-here need to be explained to the audience. This could be technobabble in a sci-fi story, or why the cops don't do something bloody obvious in a crime drama.
Fortunately for my wraparound concept, having an artsy-type explaining art to other artsy-types is something that actually happens. I just need to avoid him telling them Art 101 stuff, which should be easy enough.
Look, this last paragraph is shit. I'm direct, yes. I cannot decipher what you are saying. I'm not within your head. You imo should be more direct and understandable...
If we enter this are we going to be expected to READ every feature? I am rethinking entering because of this. I could read a coupe or even three but I do not think I could read more than that.
Look, this last paragraph is shit. I'm direct, yes. I cannot decipher what you are saying. I'm not within your head. You imo should be more direct and understandable...
Sorry if my writing wasn't clear. It was fairly context-specific to my particular idea.
I only mentioned the "As You Know, Bob" trope because I was worried that a badly-written curator could end up as an annoying firehose of exposition. At least Rod Serling was breaking the fourth wall... he had a reason to say everything he said.
If we enter this are we going to be expected to READ every feature? I am rethinking entering because of this. I could read a coupe or even three but I do not think I could read more than that.
Sean asked that we only score the scripts we've read, so presumably there's an understanding that reading all of them can be too much of a burden.
What if there are ten entries, Jeff? How many people can read ten features in a couple of weeks and give useful feedback? In the OWC it's obvious a lot of people skim through, but doesn't features deserve a little more attention? When I read a feature, it's usually a minimum of a five hour investment. If there are ten entries, that would mean I should should plan on spending fifty hours to review???
If we enter this are we going to be expected to READ every feature? I am rethinking entering because of this. I could read a coupe or even three but I do not think I could read more than that.
The good thing about this is you could select an episode to read and critique, along with the author's Intro. We've had 7WCs before and I know everybody didn't read each and every entry, more like part thereof. I don't think it should stop you, Dena, if you have a few great outlines.
first logline: When three women awake and find themselves in a one room gallery without any exit, the macabre curator raises his voice to teach them the account for their long hidden guilt.
Hey Frank, I eventually got what you were saying yesterday. You meant the technical side of painting. Which brushes are best for drawing this and that line, stylistic direction etc., got it now.
Are your painters starters or are they already experienced?
imo Anyway, this has potential. People that like movies, I believe, also like other artwork. The world and routine of painters sounds interesting. I think there's a clear audience for such kind of sophisticated themes.
Hey Frank, I eventually got what you were saying yesterday. You meant the technical side of painting. Which brushes are best for drawing this and that line, stylistic direction etc., got it now.
Are your painters starters or are they already experienced?
imo Anyway, this has potential. People that like movies, I believe, also like other artwork. The world and routine of painters sounds interesting. I think there's a clear audience for such kind of sophisticated themes.
I think it'd be fair for the curator to say "This is a Pre-Raphealite painting," but not go into detail about what that means. The details aren't that important to the story anyway, but someone watching who actually knows art will immediately think "second half of the 19th Century, rebellious against the art establishment of their day."
Moviegoers are probably more appreciative of the arts than average, but I don't think many of them think of themselves that way. It's possible for a character to appreciate art for its own sake without hitting the audience over the head with it (I like how As Good as It Gets handled it).
For the story, these particular artists are young, but no longer students. There is no one-size-fits-all description for artists-in-residence, but that's what this particular eccentric gazillionaire wants. If it doesn't get in the way of the story, this batch may include the first digital artists admitted by the program. Having a mixture of specialties is a realistic way of preventing them from going off on a tangent discussing some obscure facet of painting.
first logline: When three women awake and find themselves in a one room gallery without any exit, the macabre curator raises his voice to teach them the account for their long hidden guilt.
That's high-concept. Like Saw but with paintings. And maybe a psychological thriller instead of torture porn. Unless, you know, they have to paint their guilt with their own blood...
This is good. I could see it working beyond the challenge. Write it.
What if there are ten entries, Jeff? How many people can read ten features in a couple of weeks and give useful feedback? In the OWC it's obvious a lot of people skim through, but doesn't features deserve a little more attention? When I read a feature, it's usually a minimum of a five hour investment. If there are ten entries, that would mean I should should plan on spending fifty hours to review???
When I partook in what I think was the very 1st 7WC, I read every entry and gave very extensive feedback.
When I enter an OWC, I read (or at least attempt to read) every single entry, and leave more feedback than the vast majority does.
Why do I do this? Because it's the right thing to do.
I'm afraid I'm out on this, although I do like the challenge.
I read all of them too, Jeff. The point of those 6 and 7WC back then was to help writers finish a feature. This time around we're supposed to vote on them which means there's a time limit to do so. I cannot see myself reading 10 feature from here in a month or whatever the time allowed is.
I read all of them too, Jeff. The point of those 6 and 7WC back then was to help writers finish a feature. This time around we're supposed to vote on them which means there's a time limit to do so. I cannot see myself reading 10 feature from here in a month or whatever the time allowed is.
Agreed, which basically means the voting thing is a poor idea, which is 1 reason I'm out.
I am still thinking of doing this. I cannot decide. But I love these things and this is where my writing first started ...during an October OWC... so I'm teetering on it... full platter... filming ... the zombie film and then Pia and I are filming two shorts October 6-7th.. then I"m headed to Spain for a week October 15th... so my time is very skinny(wish I was) but I really wanna do it.
I am still thinking of doing this. I cannot decide. But I love these things and this is where my writing first started ...during an October OWC... so I'm teetering on it... full platter... filming ... the zombie film and then Pia and I are filming two shorts October 6-7th.. then I"m headed to Spain for a week October 15th... so my time is very skinny(wish I was) but I really wanna do it.
As Sean mentioned, if it doesn't come together, you can submit whatever vignettes you managed to finish as horror shorts.
Been mulling this one over but I'm not going to have time to write a full feature (on top of writing a full feature). Look forward to seeing the offerings. And I'll be in for any micro-script challenge going!
I'm convinced. We will all have a story regarding Dorian Grey. i can see it now :p
Actually, all kidding aside, I so no reason why an animal such as a snake or a shark can't e part of a painting. I think a snake would be easier Or even a tiger. (The Tiger and the Boa Constrictor, 1835 By Aloys Zotl, for example)
As for me, I don't know. i don't think I'll make the deadline. i'll try, I have some time yet. I only have three stories thus far.
I'm convinced. We will all have a story regarding Dorian Grey. i can see it now :p
Actually, all kidding aside, I so no reason why an animal such as a snake or a shark can't e part of a painting. I think a snake would be easier Or even a tiger. (The Tiger and the Boa Constrictor, 1835 By Aloys Zotl, for example)
As for me, I don't know. i don't think I'll make the deadline. i'll try, I have some time yet. I only have three stories thus far.
Someone says it can't? I started thinking about Gurza in paintings.
It can be series of sketches of Gurza done in black and white.
I don't believe Sean said anything about the scripts having to be based on any already existing ideas, paintings or anything else, other than the Night Gallery style. C'mon people. Movies are make belief. You can make up your own paintings or pictures and stories.
You know what I mean. But now I'm wondering if I should have kept a cork in it because it's not a terrible idea. Maybe I could have used it.in some way.
I have long decided that when I have one typo in a message forum, especially a writing one, not to edit and revise the comment a hundred times.
That's high-concept. Like Saw but with paintings. And maybe a psychological thriller instead of torture porn. Unless, you know, they have to paint their guilt with their own blood...
This is good. I could see it working beyond the challenge. Write it.
Well, there's not much else than the high concept premise yet. I wrote a perfect opening but then, I found the same problems as you did here, slasher or long run. It's simply not my genre I guess. I really really want to write although I cannot feel true substance in suffering, which Horror is imo. You could make me learn. I appreciate your work.
There are vague ideas of mine to go forward albeit I'm simply not secure. There's something missing. You wouldn't want to join me, would you? Write me.
Hey, Alex, your last post here is a bit vague. Are you looking for a co-writer? If yes, I'd love to try. But let's see if that's what you're saying.
Yes, I do. And I couldn't have any better than you, Kham. Since showing some interest in the vague premise, I hoped Rene, or somehow, anybody, woluld jump in (said it before), but honestly, I wouldn't have believed he or anybody would ever. So, it'd be great if you would try - A definite Yes. Let's talk tomorrow if you want. The opening is only 3p- a short intro
Well, there's not much else than the high concept premise yet. I wrote a perfect opening but then, I found the same problems as you did here, slasher or long run. It's simply not my genre I guess. I really really want to write although I cannot feel true substance in suffering, which Horror is imo. You could make me learn. I appreciate your work.
There are vague ideas of mine to go forward albeit I'm simply not secure. There's something missing. You wouldn't want to join me, would you? Write me.
That's that.
I read the opening. I think it's a solid setup. You've taken what I thought might be unmarketable (anthology based on owned IP) and given it a twist that could be interesting in its own right.
Apologies but I haven't got time to co-write. I would suggest they each tell a stories that somehow link the women together in ways they didn't realise. So they're all their for the same reason of revenge, perhaps.
I read the opening. I think it's a solid setup. You've taken what I thought might be unmarketable (anthology based on owned IP) and given it a twist that could be interesting in its own right.
Yeah, I know, then, so far it's nothing but smoke and mirrors.
I would suggest they each tell a stories that somehow link the women together in ways they didn't realise. So they're all their for the same reason of revenge, perhaps. Good luck with it.
Thanks for checking it out. The sentence I underlined from your message is very interesting. Haven't seen it from that side. My first idea was, as you see in the logline, that the pictures are connected to a personal guilt of each of them. Then, as I thought about your words, it might be that there's something they "don't know", something that happened to them which they originally found was clear but in thruth is connected to the responsibility of another woman in that room.
And the curator plots that knowledge he got against them.
However, there's nothing more than this short setup yet. I'll talk to Kham how she see things and hope she's in as a co.
The only thing I hate about this is that we didn't get a notification message or email. I only fiund out about this today. A writer who loses a headstart of 3 weeks should be my first vignette.
Well, I for one am going to try. I am facing two problems, though.
One: I'm completely out of my element with the genre. That's fine so long it becomes a learning experience for me, and the script doesn't cause any serious injury to readers.
Two: As I get my ideas into writing, they're taking up fewer pages than I expected.
The second point is partly due to not having any experience writing for suspense.
I'm sure two actors and a director can make this action work:
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The couple proceeds down the sidewalk, with Thomas casually scanning for a nice place to eat and Liz glancing nervously at each window she passes.
The male is oblivious to any danger, the female is worried sick, and the director could drag this out for as much screen time as necessary. But it reads fast and takes up virtually no space on the page.
How does one occasionally cut away to an observer without completely messing up the flow of the foreground scene?
For context, there is a group of characters being watched over the course of several scenes. The primary action involves those characters, but I want to indicate that the observer is doodling a sketch of them. Each scene might have one or two glimpses at this sketch without revealing more than the observer's hand.
Using INTERCUT or formally switching scenes back and forth seems like overkill.
I may be wrong but I'm assuming these are related questions? I'd say the best thing to do is study some pro scripts that use this effectively. The Conversation comes to mind. I recall the opening is a really long, complex back and forth between a couple walking and an observer.
I'm not seeing the script on google for some reason. I can send you it if you want.
I may be wrong but I'm assuming these are related questions? I'd say the best thing to do is study some pro scripts that use this effectively. The Conversation comes to mind. I recall the opening is a really long, complex back and forth between a couple walking and an observer.
I'm not seeing the script on google for some reason. I can send you it if you want.
That would be super helpful.
These two bits are not in the same vignette, but yes they are both in the 7WC I'm trying to bring together.
These two bits are not in the same vignette, but yes they are both in the 7WC I'm trying to bring together.
I sent you an email. Detective/thrillers are probably more likely to have lots of scenes of people observing from different vantage points. Speaking of vantage point... the movie Vantage Point!
I'm thinking of scrapping the Shark Man vignette and replacing it with one inspired by the Mandela Effect (or the Berenstain/Berenstein Bears Effect). Some people seem to falsely remember a genie movie with the comedian Sinbad called Shazaam. Obviously, we know Shaq played KAZAAM.
My idea is someone uncovers the long-lost Shazaam movie and gets caught up in a conspiracy.
I got some stories/ideas on paper but nothing whole as of yet.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Well, I for one am going to try. I am facing two problems, though.
One: I'm completely out of my element with the genre. That's fine so long it becomes a learning experience for me, and the script doesn't cause any serious injury to readers.
Two: As I get my ideas into writing, they're taking up fewer pages than I expected.
The second point is partly due to not having any experience writing for suspense.
I find that the hardest part is that part between FADE IN and FADE OUT
Hang in there Frank. If I知 in, I知 the one that痴 going to get crapped on. Lol.
Joking aside, you値l have time to edit after the reviews.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I h ave not started.. have a semi-idea... but thinking about writing it while on vacation in a week... trying to push through on a feature right now to FADE OUT ... was recently told "Do NOT start something until you finish what you are working on" ... I've gotten in the bad habit of writing 50 pages then losing interest and jumping to another project...
I'm going to start tonight in trying to get an outline of a feature down. lol.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Thanks. Can't wait to read what you've got cooking.
Hopefully you do submit. I would suggest doing so even if you feel it's crap. Your crap is better than mine. .
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Thanks. Can't wait to read what you've got cooking.
Hopefully you do submit. I would suggest doing so even if you feel it's crap. Your crap is better than mine. .
Gabe
I think all crap should be treated equal so .. if you'll read my crap ... I'll read yours haha Good luck on it... gonna do a weekend script warrior on this one... so... it'll be super duper crap.
I got some stories/ideas on paper but nothing whole as of yet.
Gabe
I don't think I'll make it. I hate the wraparound with the curator, I fear folks will check out because it's that bad, and not bother with stories.I'll keep on, but it's more than likely I'll take that bum and his precious paintings out and split them up into short scripts.
I will say post it since you never know. Worst case, you値l get notes to revise it. Lol.
I知 debating on having 3 or 4 stories. The last story being a wraparound with curator. I値l find out if I need to satisfy the page count.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
If the wraparound storyline is not working, lose it. You probably don稚 need it.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Anyone done with their shorts? I知 almost done with one, got two more to go. But was wondering if anyone was interested, we could swap shorts to review or seek help in a story plot line?
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Anyone done with their shorts? I知 almost done with one, got two more to go. But was wondering if anyone was interested, we could swap shorts to review or seek help in a story plot line?
Sure I would read. Just put a link of an online storage in here or contact me via my email which you find at the title page of my teaser Zone at the lower half of this thread :
I値l send it via email once done. As opposed to that teaser, have a you finished a short for this feature?
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
As opposed to that teaser, have a you finished a short for this feature? Gabe
I got some pages, yes, just writing the second one in the next days. If those are really "short stories" by definition is hard to say. Yes and No. I ran a bit wild I guess. The pictures do ignite an "angle" related to the picture, but it's more of a part that's integral to the whole feature as well. I didn't procced like "there's a picture and one story about it from A to Z- next " ... In mine there are differnt timelines interrupting the the picture's short segment. I didn't stay in the short all along so to say,; hard to explain....
I also will probably have only two paintings, no wraparound. The story simply developed that way and, well, it's a feature and not painting by numbers From my side it'd be okay if someone of you is a bit off from the parameters as well. I just hope to finish, you know.
I get you. The only reason why I asked was so that it値l be even, a short for a short. The link is for a teaser opening which doesn稚 seem to be fair lol. I consider mine to be shorts independent from the longer story I知 working on within the feature. We値l definitely be called out on some rules here but as long as we finish it痴 all good.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Woah, 19 days left and I just started. But I cranked out 10 pages yesterday and I know what I'm writing about and where I'm going with this. Still, don't think I will manage to hit the finish line by that time. But I'll read as many as I can.
I donｿｽt doubt your abilities khamanna . I have a 窶70/30 for窶 hunch youｿｽll have it in by deadline.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I get you. The only reason why I asked was so that it値l be even, a short for a short. The link is for a teaser opening which doesn稚 seem to be fair lol. I consider mine to be shorts independent from the longer story I知 working on within the feature. We値l definitely be called out on some rules here but as long as we finish it痴 all good.
Hey, received your mail and will read and reply soon. When it comes to my stuff I actually don't think about editing and reconsidering now, don't know. I just look forward to get a draft done. But I can send you my whole 20+ pages if you like to look into...
Send it. I need to get back into screenwritering again.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I am making better progress than I expected, and will probably actually have something to submit.
Roughly the first half is written (two vignettes plus wrap-around material) if someone might want to swap reads for one or two stories. Vignette 1 ("Sister versus Sister") is 17.5 pages and Vignette 2 ("A Moment of Reflection") is about 11.5 pages.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Not sure of the British spelling of Ripley. Just a fan of the movie lol.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I am making better progress than I expected, and will probably actually have something to submit.
Roughly the first half is written (two vignettes plus wrap-around material) if someone might want to swap reads for one or two stories. Vignette 1 ("Sister versus Sister") is 17.5 pages and Vignette 2 ("A Moment of Reflection") is about 11.5 pages.
Alright, I think I will have something for it for sure - more than a half way into my gurza story and there's much more story in my head to tell. I'm not sure about submitting, because it's very very first draft, it's a pre-first draft even, as it's a stream of conscious at the moment. But I have it and will be submitting later or else. Good luck to everyone)
I am 100% sure that yours won't be the only one that will be considered first drafty. lol.
At the end, it's meant to help each other complete a feature and hopefully find someone to get it made.
I'll offer to review it for you if you like.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
How are people doing over on this end? Trying to finish two tales for tonight.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
How are people doing over on this end? Trying to finish two tales for tonight.
This reads as if you got many many stories.
As you know from reading parts of mine, I got only two since yet, loooong stories each, and my last, third painting isn't even connected to a 'then following story', although it could be seen as a wraparound, so I'm going to 'slightly' violate the rules to some degree there, I believe.
But what can I say, I just hope to finish, stand at p40 by now. And from my opinion, as long as you all have artwork displayed and stories related to them, I'm fine. There's too much respect in me for people that are able to create a feature screenplay - other than saying, this and that is against the parameter.
What do you think about my working title 'The Zone'? I myself think it needs a bit more.
You already read my one of my short tales, Alexander. Lol. I知 not trying to keep it that short but if it does, it does and I gotta fill in that page count lol.
I値l need to find out what the overall story is to determine if the Zone is a proper title for your feature. But that痴 cosmetics.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I値l need to find out what the overall story is to determine if the Zone is a proper title for your feature. But that痴 cosmetics.
Yeah, but a title to me should stand on its own imo. I completely dislike titles when the writer says, 'wait the title makes perfect sense when you once saw the content'. That's illogic to me. I just think The Zone isn't doing the upfront job. Not sure there
I'm at page 50, but I have to insert a short in there as my shorts are in chronological order. They are all closely interrelated by the way and the uniting story is long as well. Now I'm working on the final pages to finish the story. So it's little left, just that short and the ending of the uniting story.
Many people fall in mine. I'm not sure if it's a horror though. It's a psychological thriller for sure. And some crazy stuff is happening, but no blood, no graphics, no violence.
I'm very unhappy with the way I started it. Have to think of the beginning - the characters are very bleak there.
The good thing is I clearly see my characters. Not something that often happen to me. I'm not sure if you'll see them, too. I mean I wish...
How are people doing over on this end? Trying to finish two tales for tonight.
Gabe
I've got two vignettes written (being updated with the feedback you and Jeff gave), the other two outlined, and the wraparound planned out.
My vignettes seem episodic/unrelated, but they do have elements in common other than all happening in the same general area. Like Kham's, my stories are also in chronological order.
Yeah, but a title to me should stand on its own imo. I completely dislike titles when the writer says, 'wait the title makes perfect sense when you once saw the content'. That's illogic to me.
My overall title is Glass House, and the reference will be clear from the first scene though not all the nuances are obvious up-front.
Yeah, but a title to me should stand on its own imo. I completely dislike titles when the writer says, 'wait the title makes perfect sense when you once saw the content'. That's illogic to me. I just think The Zone isn't doing the upfront job. Not sure there
That bit is difficult as writing the script. I would say to not worry about that now and focus on the shorts. Usually, things reveal themselves over time. I came up with the title of my second short while writing it. I'll be sending it to you soon or even better the whole thing lol.
Khamanna
Like I said in the beginning, this is going to be all first drafts. The work will come in when we have to rewrite it. lol.
FrankM
That's good. I'm trying to flesh out the third one, which I bullet pointed the scenes. But I still have to think about the wraparound tale and flesh out another one.
Good to hear this. Let's see if we can finish on time. lol.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
What do you think about my working title 'The Zone'? I myself think it needs a bit more.
Alex, I quite like the title but it instantly made me think of Stephen King's The Dead Zone which just with that extra adjective makes it sound a lot more powerful and creepy.
Did you have anything else in the running by way of title? If not, I'll wait until I read it and let you know if anything stands out.
Well, I got my tales and wraparound tale figured out. Onto writing this damn thing lol. Fingers crossed.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I'm adding a few more kills to my "ear" vignette. The Mandela Effect vignette is all written. The "ear" has a beginning and an end, but no real middle.
Mine is three, they could be a stand alone but at the same time they are very closely connected, so I don't know. The wrap about text is pretty extensive and the unifying story is the king to the whole thing. I don't know if we were supposed to write this way. But I see some of you are saying they deviated from the rules a bit - sounds good, mine is not the only one then.
I'm going to submit mine just for you to see that I did put an effort. But I'll probably ask people not to read it yet. The grammar and everything - huge embarrassment and I need to edit the hell out of it before you can take a look.
So, it's five of us writing for it, right? Libby, are you in?
If I include the wraparound tale, it'll be five. But I'll see what the page count is to see if I should eliminate a tale out.
Mines are stand alone but serve the story.
I think I'll beat you in incomprehension and grammar mistakes for a feature lol.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
It was implicit in what I said, but Glass House has four more-or-less standalone vignettes and a wrap-around with its own finale/conclusion.
The vignettes are different sub-genres, which adds to their episodic feel. Hope that痴 not going to bother anyone... I知 just too new to the genre to come up with 3+ stories in the same vein and still make them all distinct.
A question! We all know name David, right. But in my culture we call David's Davood. or Davud. So what is it - Davood or Davud? It's pronounced d-short a-v-short u- d.
A question! We all know name David, right. But in my culture we call David's Davood. or Davud. So what is it - Davood or Davud? It's pronounced d-short a-v-short u- d.
Phonetically, Davud would be closest to David, I think. Ha! It's funny. My brother's name is David and when we were growing up we'd often call him Doovad or Doov for short. Just musing.
A question! We all know name David, right. But in my culture we call David's Davood. or Davud. So what is it - Davood or Davud? It's pronounced d-short a-v-short u- d.
I think it depends on how important the sound is. If the character is described as having an accent from Lumpaland, a good actor would read the lines in a Lumpaland accent and all will be fine on film. If, however, it's important for the reader to "hear" the sound then it's probably fine to spell some words phonetically in dialogue.
There's a special issue with character names. Unless you plan to refer to David as DAVOOD throughout the script, you'll need to make clear that this bit of dialogue refers to this character. I had a similar issue introducing one of my characters for this feature.
Quoted Text
CURATOR Welcome. It is so good to finally meet all of you. You must be Martirio.
MARTIRIO (22), Hispanic young man, is the only one of the Artists dressed in a suit and tie. The suit is not expensive, but the three gold rings on his fingers might be.
CURATOR And Zhen.
He mispronounces the name as 纏en. ZHEN (25) - Chinese woman with blue hair in a graphic tee shirt, ripped jeans, and an asymmetric collection of piercings - smiles although it痴 clear she has corrected this mistake countless times before.
ZHEN Zhen. A lot of my friends just call me 笛en.
For the Spanish-sounding name, I figure most English readers will decode it properly as Mar-tee-ree-oh, so no special handling required. On the other hand, I think most people unfamiliar with how Chinese transliterates to English would make the same mistake I had the Curator make. Here slipping in the correct (or, at least, close enough) pronunciation occurs organically.
Thanks for the title suggestions. I guess I just wanted to test the waters, especially if it may receive definite negative reactions.
I think the vibe must be clearly delivered in a title and to a degree 'Zone' or 'The Zone' is a good direction so far. What I have is pretty hard in some areas but mainly on a psycholgical area than on display, so I need a title that mirrors that certain 'sophisticated' feeling, imo, like: Black Swan, Shutter Island, Cloverfield Lane
Glass House seems to have a similar direction btw. Good one, Frank
Some of you talk about vignettes titles. This isn't a must, or is it?
Many talk about vignettes titles. This isn't a must, or is it?
It's not a requirement. In my case each vignette's title is the in-universe title of the associated painting. By some cosmic coincidence, it always seems to work out
It's up to you if you want to add titles to the stories. I'm putting titles on mine.
I'm excited for once about my entry. lol. I've been looking for something to get me back into writing.
And since two people revealed their script title, I'm adding mine to the mix: La Botanica.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I thought I thanked you for Davood and said "Davood it is". Hmm, must have left it on some other thread. Anyway, thanks.
And by the way, I faded out!! Good luck to all and by "good luck" I mean good luck on you to finally finish it and call it a completed feature. Although that'll still be pre-first draft yada-yada.
I still need to insert two more scenes, two places need a major redo as they don't make sense - I copy pasted etc. But that's pre-rewrite work. Still a lot to do. Fade Out doesn't mean anything these days...
With all the shorts done, I'm working on making it cohesive and fluid.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
What are you all writing about? It's not anonymous, so we can share a bit here I think. I already told mine, most of it at least.
I can't wait to read your stories because it's a hard subject - shorts that are interrelated but each can stand on its own. I'm not sure if I succeeded. But I'm curious to see what it should be like. I haven't watched the Night At the Museum. Maybe I should.
Mine's centers around Santaria, a religion some people practice in the Spanish culture. However, I created a somewhat new religion loosely based off it. Don't want to disrespect the people's religion.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Mine's centers around Santaria, a religion some people practice in the Spanish culture. However, I created a somewhat new religion loosely based off it. Don't want to disrespect the people's religion.
Gabe
I have some references to religious practices which I researched to get them right. And then there's my completely made up crap about magical spells.
Still working on mine. Iｿｽm getting to my first tale in the feature.
I always keep budget in mind. Since Iｿｽm writing it, I always consider myself the director as well. Probably explains why I mess up in my writing a lot lol.
Regarding 5 characters, do you mean overall in the feature or in a short?
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
As written, two of my vignettes require significant special effects, and a third might find special effects easier than practical effects. There's also a montage that ping-pongs around several cities, but a clever crew can fake that.
Planning to do a rewrite after I get a couple of reviews in so I can submit it to contests for next year.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
It's more a problem that the stories in my head aren't compatible with no-budget filmmaking. For example, most of the scenes in "A Moment of Reflection" would require double-pass filming.
When they were planning Lord of the Rings, they were worried they'd need to use triple-pass filming (Hobbit pass, Dwarf pass, Human/Elf pass), but lucked out by casting an actor for the Dwarf who was actually that much bigger than the actors for the Hobbits.
When there痴 a will, there痴 a way. I think they would have found a way to resolve that if it didn稚 pan out.
I wouldn稚 stress it much. If they got lucky, why can you?
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I wouldn't stress it either, it's just I'm trying to come up with something low budget for a long time and fail again and again. That fire is a killer. But I already came up with something else. It was so easy but no I had to go with fire inside the building. How's it even possible.
Probably depends what you're writing for. If you want to submit it to comps the budget shouldn't really matter. If you don't want to bother with the comps, I guess the lower the budget is the better. But it's not the rule perhaps either.
Worse case scenario, you can use the script as a calling card for other writing jobs.
But for now, no need to worry. Go with where the story takes you. If that means a fire, have fire lol. You can change it later on or we can help you come up with something low budget when we read it.
No stress.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I was contemplating that they値l find someone who can best pass it off and tell the audience that they were the best person lol. That痴 what they usually do.
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Haven't followed this, to be honest. Just quick glances to make sure no crap was going on, but it seems rather sedate, lol. I've been super busy with non writing stuff for the last year and have pretty much not written anything during that time. However, something happened in the last month. Something really bad concerning the health of a friend of mine and I now feel I need to focus on something completely different before my mind gets overloaded with emotions. I know there's only 9 days left, but I'm throwing my hat into the ring. I will do my best to write one before the deadline. Title will be 9 Circles and have five or so stories. Narrator will intro us to the stories via Gustave Dore's pictures of Dante's Inferno. Sins people! They are as old as we are.
Haven't followed this, to be honest. Just quick glances to make sure no crap was going on, but it seems rather sedate, lol. I've been super busy with non writing stuff for the last year and have pretty much not written anything during that time. However, something happened in the last month. Something really bad concerning the health of a friend of mine and I now feel I need to focus on something completely different before my mind gets overloaded with emotions. I know there's only 9 days left, but I'm throwing my hat into the ring. I will do my best to write one before the deadline. Title will be 9 Circles and have five or so stories. Narrator will intro us to the stories via Gustave Dore's pictures of Dante's Inferno. Sins people! They are as old as we are.
Glad to see you writing, and look forward to seeing what you come up with... but wish it were under happier circumstances.
We all understand this is going to first drafts so we窶决e cool about it lol.
Hopefully the friend is ok. Positive vibes to the friend.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Haven't followed this, to be honest. Just quick glances to make sure no crap was going on, but it seems rather sedate, lol. I've been super busy with non writing stuff for the last year and have pretty much not written anything during that time. However, something happened in the last month. Something really bad concerning the health of a friend of mine and I now feel I need to focus on something completely different before my mind gets overloaded with emotions. I know there's only 9 days left, but I'm throwing my hat into the ring. I will do my best to write one before the deadline. Title will be 9 Circles and have five or so stories. Narrator will intro us to the stories via Gustave Dore's pictures of Dante's Inferno. Sins people! They are as old as we are.
This Friday and Saturday I work overnight so I should be able to get a good number of pages in. Iｿｽll strive to finish it.
Doubt has been settling in with some of these stories in that if it fits the criteria but at this point Iｿｽm going through it. Iｿｽve come to far to quit now lol.
Weｿｽre close to the deadline. We can do it!
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Down to the wire. Going to see if I can finish this over the weekend. Hopefully everyone's ready.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I wonder if Darren is out. He was writing for this thing too. That's how I remember it.
It'll be darn close. I don't think it'll happen though. I wasn't too crazy about the curator angle, so I made up a new "horror host". Then there's the tone of the work and how disjointed it feels.
The steam has gone out of the engine, so to speak. They read better as stand alone shorts. They will show up, the ones worth keeping, although I haven't started writing the last tale yet. I might save that for another time.I didn't have as much focus as I had with the recent OWC.
My curator is a hybrid of Rod Serling, Hugh Hefner, and Count Floyd. Maybe a few influences from Are You Afraid of the Dark? and Tales from the Crypt. There's a little homage to Alfred Hitchcock Presents.
I'm getting the "writing a paper at the last minute" vibe hear lol. It sucks but I'm determined to finish this and post it by deadline.
Can't wait to read the others.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
On a side note: It looks like I may not be able to make the deadline. Doesn't mean that I won't submit it after. I will but at it's current state, it's not even worth it. lol. I'm a slow writer. Sorry ladies and gents.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Woah! Lost Darren - but that was kind of expected somewhat because Darren didn't come here that often lately. But Gabe...! You had it in the bag, what happened?
I don't know if I should submit mine then. It's much worse than yours I'm sure at the present state. So, I'm scared to embarrass myself.
Out of curiosity, would you mind doing an exchange of what weｿｽve got written down so far? You will then see that yours is a bit better off than mine. Lol. I have a total of 15 pages that I consider decent.
Iｿｽm a slow writer. As I mentioned, I usually keep budget in mind so Iｿｽve been eliminating fluff and keeping things low budget. At this point, Iｿｽve been tryin to write in staccato style.
In addition, as I much as I love this theme, I believe My script wonｿｽt fit the criteria. For instance, my script wonｿｽt make that 75 pg mark. I sent a tale to prussianmoby which was only 5 pages. If I add a bit more dialogue, 6-7.
Iｿｽm going try to work on two tales tonight. But definitely one tale will be done lol.
I donｿｽt know if I will be able to submit by the deadline but Iｿｽll do my best.
I may not get the best reviews but at least itｿｽs work Iｿｽve did my best on.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
On a side note: It looks like I may not be able to make the deadline. Doesn't mean that I won't submit it after. I will but at it's current state, it's not even worth it. lol. I'm a slow writer. Sorry ladies and gents.
Gabe
Just emailed Don since he's the webmaster and all, and this cuts out the middleman. This is very odd if you ask me.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Out of curiosity, would you mind doing an exchange of what weｿｽve got written down so far? You will then see that yours is a bit better off than mine. Lol. I have a total of 15 pages that I consider decent.
Iｿｽm a slow writer. As I mentioned, I usually keep budget in mind so Iｿｽve been eliminating fluff and keeping things low budget. At this point, Iｿｽve been tryin to write in staccato style.
In addition, as I much as I love this theme, I believe My script wonｿｽt fit the criteria. For instance, my script wonｿｽt make that 75 pg mark. I sent a tale to prussianmoby which was only 5 pages. If I add a bit more dialogue, 6-7.
Iｿｽm going try to work on two tales tonight. But definitely one tale will be done lol.
I donｿｽt know if I will be able to submit by the deadline but Iｿｽll do my best.
I may not get the best reviews but at least itｿｽs work Iｿｽve did my best on.
Gabe
I'll send you mine in two days or so. Mine is at 71 pages right now but I'm planning to add as I reread.
So, are you saying you have a 5 pages of text and expecting to add 6-7 to it? I didn't understand that part. Maybe you could send yours to me at your earliest and I may find a way to help somehow.
Sometimes when you get the story right it writes itself. Other times not though, but you know, maybe it's one of those cases. Anyway, the point is to complete a script. Another pair of eyes never hurt. I'll exchange deffinitely just let me reread, or it's a mess there past 35th page right now. ANd I do think I've got time to get the ending straight. No fire. But let's see.
I actually started wriiting mine because of your cheering on the thread, Gabe - so thank you for that. I want to be of some help as well.
I meant that one of my stories is 5 pages long. If I add a bit more dialogue, I can extend it to 6-7 pgs.
I will finish this script. It痴 just that it痴 taking longer than expected. Depending on how tonight goes, I値l see what happens.
I知 always there to help fellow writers out. It痴 a first draft so it痴 not going to be perfect but I feel mine is atrocious like the grammar and formatting lol.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I haven't even started yet, so I guess I'm out. A family member had just been diagnosed with CHF so that had to take priority. Sorry for not being around much.
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Sorry to hear, Pia. Hope it's all alright in the end.
Darren, yeah, you've got full 6 days! And if your stories work better as separate units - so let them be. Cloud Atlas was the same as I recall.
Mine don't work separately at all and aren't exactly horror. I think. So I pushed the parameters there. So what. I think for this kind of challenge it's okay to strain it a bit.
Gabe, I did fade out but I'm not exactly at 75 pages just yet. It's 71. Oh, and have you read The Boring Think in the other challenge? If you have - mine reads just like that one at the moment. The difference is that writer intended to write a pisser, but me - mine is all natural. A natural beauty. That's about my grammar, weird wordings you name it. Ironically, it happens to be also the busiest week of the year for me.
Anyway, good luck to all! I'll try to sumbit via dropbox this time, so I can make changes to the script before the reads come in. I might even ask you not to read))
Iｿｽm up to pg 20 now with my second story. Lol. Iｿｽm planning to do the same with submitting my script via Dropbox so I can do the edits easier.
FrankM
Youｿｽre better off than I am.
If I do submit this, Iｿｽm blaming it on booze Lmao. (I donｿｽt drink by the way)
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Reading some of the posts here, I see myself in good company since I also arrived somewhere at the 70 page mark with a FADE OUT written, which felt good of course.
Since many of you helped me: especially Gabe gave great feedback I took to heart and Kham who inspired a lot of my attempt, I like to share an interesting experience I made today. Although you probably know it,,,, ;-) but I myself forgot it as well, how powerful it is, so maybe, it helps you to remember.
Spend the 1$ on ink and paper and print out your screenplay. This today solved some issues in my script I wouldn't have believed I get done in this quantity.
It's just different to hold the paper in hand. A laptop screen you stare on can't compare in that area. Especially when checking the set-ups and pay-offs, rhythm, transitions, audience receiving, expectations, planted distractions. It's just multiple times as effective when been able to scribble everywhere and flip back and forth and in general good to get off from the 'machine'.
@ regarding the submissions imo there's no anonymity needed here since it's about the long route, the big game. The parameter explanaition has never been changed though, even as it has been proclaimed that it's all 'open'. ??? What do you think? And also what do the hosts think? Or rather rule :-)
For me, it really comes down to being a slow writer. Lol. Unfortunately it takes me time to put the idea on paper. I would like to submit something that I know I致e done my best, even though others will slaughter it. Lol.
I will submit this. Unfortunately, it looks like it痴 going to be after the deadline.
Gabe
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A deadline is a deadline. Others should not suffer since I couldn稚 keep up with deadline and criteria.
Khamanna, if you feel uncomfortable in submitting in your script, don稚 do it. I would encourage you to do so since your script is better off than mine. Lol. But it痴 your choice. I will still read it and your familiar how I review scripts. This applies to others.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Has anyone submitted yet? I know chrisbodily did. I値l probably submit it via the regular route and not via 7wc to keep things fair.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Has anyone submitted yet? I know chrisbodily did. I値l probably submit it via the regular route and not via 7wc to keep things fair.
Ah, don't worry that much, Gabe. I rechecked the foregone 7WCs and there wasn't even a voting, which I find absolutely correct btw. I'd also see no need for anonymity or anything... there's no sense to find for me.
Has anyone submitted yet? I know chrisbodily did. I値l probably submit it via the regular route and not via 7wc to keep things fair.
Gabe
Don't know of anyone other than Chris. I'll need to get mine in by Thursday evening.
The hardest part for me, being unaccustomed to the genre, is breaking the rule about characters suffering for their bad deeds. I got one guy who really deserves to be ground into hamburger... but doesn't.
Sometimes the characters come up with their own endings lol. Weｿｽll give it a read and see what we can come up with.
I may submit this with only 3 tales since the fourth one doesn窶冲 match with the other three.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Just about eight hours to go for anyone who's planning to submit (or, if you already have, to rewrite). No matter what, I just want to say I'm proud of everyone who enters or attempted it because a feature, no matter the kind, is always an undertaking. =)
I値l submit mine via the regular way. I think I致e got the fourth tale so I値l put it in, work on it a bit and then submit.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
I had an unexpected pile of work stuff pop up yesterday... but moved on to Plan B (moved a Final Draft license to my work laptop, write while traveling).
This script is getting finished whether it likes it or not
Just about eight hours to go for anyone who's planning to submit (or, if you already have, to rewrite). No matter what, I just want to say I'm proud of everyone who enters or attempted it because a feature, no matter the kind, is always an undertaking. =)
Like I said in the beginning, it's about getting something done to add to your portfolio. You never know if a producer asks for this or someone may pick it up.
This gives me energy to finish another project I've put on the back burner for a while.
Thanks Mr. Blonde.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Congrats to all who made it! I'll try to do notes on some or all. I promise I won't be harsh. It's impressive just getting a draft done that quickly. My features after two months of writing look like I projectile vomited all over the pages.
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