Did that jogger call Pia "old cow"? That jogger got what she deserved.  

Well done guys. Congratulations.

Thanks for watching all.   Remember to tell your friends to watch.  This business is built by word of link so get your linking fingers moving.

And BTW Babz reckons Pia would do great VO.  I agree.  

Just a note that Machinima.com has finally posted Issues.  It's actually a different version than the one you have seen.   Can you spot the differences?

http://www.youtube.com/user/machinima#p/u/4/fTb6eyn9LuU

I am extremely impressed by this. First off, I want to say that I completely "get" the odd sound of the receptionist's voice in the beginning. Or at least I think I do. I remember hearing this kind of voice I think in an old Frankenstein type show or something like that? Am I correct?

Anyways, it to me, is the foreshadowing of "the evil doctor" scenario. What I felt in this piece was the tone that came over perfectly. Nothing external overshadows the internal struggles that were going on inside these characters' heads. Also too, I think the fact that this is computer generated, lends a kind of unemotional quality to it even though we're dealing with emotion and I think that makes it completely interesting to analyze.

I remember reading the draft script and I didn't like the crutch that the doctor had. It felt like too much. I'm glad to see that gone.

It might have been nice to see the doctor "try" a little harder at being received by her patient. She does check her face in the mirror, but I'm not sure that that's enough.

What makes this unique is Pia's quiet voice, probing, as it were, into the mind of her patient. As this takes place, although the audience attention is intended to be fixed on the patient, they're driven to pay attention more to the doctor. Why? The sound. This is perfect in my opinion. What the audience is "seeing" with their eyes, focused on and what they are "working" with their ears is different.

I can imagine how much work went into this production. Wow! And I bet there are more secrets inside besides that red rose. ;

Sandra

I just checked out the Machinima channel. Some of the lovely comments were...

"whats up with the voice of the therapist?"

"wtf, is wrong with that chick's nose?"

But then there were comments like

"Ooooh, what a twist!"
"that was really good."

All and all I think the commenters are being really nice to The Dark.  Though one wonders where this guys head is at.

"where are the sex scenes? Oo"

I loved it, and I particularly loved Pia's voice-work -- she is nutty to think it is anything but excellent.

I also noticed the therapists nose (prior to reading the comment above), but I think it is appropriate, because (I think) she is supposed to be "unattractive" -- although I have to admit I did not really get that from the character.

She seemed kind of cute, particularly with that sultry accent haha.

Marvelous work, Cornetto.  I am so impressed.  Really.

And how neat that Pia got to perform lines she had actually written.

Did you enjoy having that kind of control, Pia, or did it only increase the pressure -- knowing that as writer and performer, any bad lines would pretty much be "all your fault"?

Quoted from bert I also noticed the therapists nose (prior to reading the comment above), but I think it is appropriate, because (I think) she is supposed to be "unattractive" -- although I have to admit I did not really get that from the character. Did you enjoy having that kind of control, Pia, or did it only increase the pressure -- knowing that as writer and performer, any bad lines would pretty much be "all your fault"?

The version of Moviestorm that I built this with has no "unattractive" women - not even the older ones - so unfortunately I did my best on that score.  The newest version of Moviestorm does allow for unattractive women, unfortunately it came out after I was already well into this project and I couldn't easily change the Doctor.

The voice actors give me three interpretations of each line and I pick the one I like.  So while she might have had some control over it, it was ultimately my choice.  

Very well done, everyone. Quite impressive.

I do think Pia's voice was too quiet at first.  It sounded off and a bit odd.  Later, though, it was excellent.

I also think the doctor's looks were too good for what she was supposed to look like.  This was a detriment to the story, but if it was unavoidable, what more can you do?

Nice job!!

Very impressive. It played out exactly how I envisioned it when I was reading the script like half a year ago.

Well done!

Allllright!   I've been waiting to see this!

Very good job, everyone!

Pia, I think your voice was perfect for the doctor. A little quiet at first (were you trying to be quiet at home?)   but very, very good, my friend.

I also liked the doctor's last line. Made me chuckle.

I can't wait to see the rest of them.

Congrats!

Cindy

Hey Guys,

Just checked this out, and thought it was pretty damn cool.  Nice job.

Pia, for what it's worth, I thought the voice work was excellent, and like Phil said, pretty sexy.

I guess I'd agree with Dreamscale in that I thought the Doc could have been made a little more homely.  Then again, that may say more about me than anything else as I'm critiquing (sp.) the looks of a machinima.  Whatevs, don't judge me!

Craig

Thanks!  

Anyway, I'm bumping this only because I had a link to it on my personal family YT channel and my husband told me to get rid of that link because it was too adult and all our family and friends would be offended............................

I've told them, if I die not to read my stuff!!  

Really?!? He thought they would be offended?  For this innocent little script?  

You better make sure they don't read your other stuff.

Quoted from mcornetto Really?!? He thought they would be offended?  For this innocent little script?   You better make sure they don't read your other stuff.

If people are offended by that, then I'm definitely not going down to the basement and digging up... No, that makes me really scared. I'm going easy on the pepper. Salt wins.

Sandra