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ReneC
Posted: November 4th, 2011, 12:16pm Report to Moderator
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My, my. It's full steam ahead now!


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X, you murderer! How could you slit Y's throat and just try to pretend like it wasn't you. I think someone's trying to frame him.

Seriously, who kills someone in the bathroom?

Good stuff, though, E.D. The train coming to a stop over water is an interesting development.


Hey Blonde,

Glad you got a kick out of it.
It's my first time playing the game, I was a little nervous.
I wanted to shoehorn as many mystery tropes as I could into three minutes.  

I thought it would be fun to stop/strand the train for a bit.
Perhaps the Engineer would need some assistance tracking down short circuits, etc.
Yay! Mini missions! Split groups up, etc. Classic mystery stuff.

And give U a cat nap while the mice play amongst themselves!

Oh yeah, someone died too.

Thanks for having me along, it was a blast!

Regards,
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My, my. It's full steam ahead now!


On a stopped train no less!

Usual,

Had to give Michael a reason to wave his resurrection wand.
The Occupado D-bag line was sorta an apology, hope it makes your throat feel better!
Thanks for being a good sport, hope you enjoyed your tidy death!

*flush*

E.D.



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Clue anyone.


Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages.
https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
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Mr. Blonde
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Clue was good times.

And, it's my first time playing this, too, E.D.. I've been wanting to but since I've been here, there's never been a successful one to play.


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Sandra Elstree.
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E.D. I really enjoyed your post. The comedy with the letters was really good and the whole "Murderer!" thing. It was all very light in tone underneath. It really livened things a lot. The train stopping over water was really good. It brought some of the outdoors into the trip.  

Sandra



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Ooh good job Love the letters debacle:p
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I guess it's only me, but I can't follow anything that is happening because no one has a name.

The "letter names" don't work for me at all.  I have no clue who anyone is or what's even going on.  I don't even know who's male and female!

I'm not sure I'm going to be able to continue without a major time investment.  Maybe I need a strong drink...
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It is tough. I often have to stop and think, okay, who is this again?
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Mr. Blonde
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Isn't that why Michael created the list on the first page that lists who everyone is, next to their respective letters?


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I find it difficult too and it takes you away fomr the plot(s) when you have to consult a list.
I have copied the text into Final Draft and given them all names beginning with the same letter, formatted THEN read it, it's so much easier.


http://darrentomalin.webs.com/index.htm

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mcornetto
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That is why I created the list.  

The letters will get better once a few characters go.  There's just a lot of characters at the moment and you guys have been insisting on keeping them in large groups which also makes it a bit hard to follow.  But it'll get better when there's fewer of them.

And by all means work that frustration with the letters out in the script.   Don't you think these characters are frustrated with having to use letters instead of names.  Use it, don't fight it.

Anyway, good entry Brett.  Sorry that he chose you T but you weren't the only one alone - he could have easily chosen me.

I'll update the info after I have some coffee.  Sandra is up next.  G-d help us.
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Mr. Blonde
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Uh oh... Sandra's up next? This ought to be a mighty interesting one. Go Sandra! =)


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Dreamscale
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Daz, can you E-Mail me that doc in a PDF format?  I can't make heads or tails of what I'm reading so far and literally have no clue what's happening or what's happened.

Thanks.
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Dreamscale
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SANDRA!!!!!!  YES!!!!  SANDRA!!!!!

Now, my dearest Sandra, remember, keep it real.  No teleporting, no astral planes, no extra terrestrial characters.

Sharks, whales, and bears are fine, but keep everything realistic...please?  
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