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Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
You got things taken care of Gabe? I wouldn't mind seeing what you wrote too because I have to take the next turn and it would give me a good head start.
You just wait, Mr. razzy nazzy. I know what kulanu yachad means.
I think Gabe's off line right now. Nothing sent. I'm drinking shiraz and after that, I think I'm just going into Shabbat mode; so no worries. Minyana (tomorrow). How do you write that in Italian? back at ya.
Thanks for the offer but I sent it to Michael so he can have a head start. Hope my entry is good and appealing enough.
Gabe
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
You could have sent it to Sandra as well, Gabe. More feedback is good and I've been providing too much of it this game. Rely on your fellow player, make some script buddies.
Things I've noticed that are common problems:
- Don't try to do too much in your scene. It's fine if you just advance one or two characters.
- Try not to have everyone in the same room. Stripping away the names and using just letters proves how confusing that really is.
- Another thing that came out from stripping the names is that people refer to other characters by name in dialog far to much. Most of the time you don't need it. It sounds really silly when your using the letter - but it's probably just as silly when you're using a name.
- A lot of people, not everyone, need to work on their characters voice in their dialogue, or just dialogue in general.
But it's great that everyone has hung in so far - I'm really proud of you all. Only one more turn for everyone to go. Then a third turn for the author elected the master killer by vote, just to sum the story up.
I get a resurrection rather than a kill on my turn, so one character is coming back to life. Any suggestions for who that should be and why? PM me about them.
Ok. My turn is all ready for when Ripley posts his. Hopefully Ripley doesn't change things too much from the version he sent to me. I'm not sure what to say about what I wrote except maybe that I guarantee you'll be surprised.
Sounds good to me so need an explaination... at the end do we vote on who wrote the best kill and they become the master killer? Or is their a designated person as tje killer?
At the end there will be two characters that are not dead - if I counted right at least. You will vote on those two characters. You will pick which is the killer. The killer will then end it. It can end with the killer dying or with the last survivor dying - it's up to the master killer which ending will happen.
Oh, I was thinking of going alphabetically by the letter you chose (not counting U). I figured that would be the fairest way to do it. So Jeff would go first and Zane would go last. If anyone has a different suggestion, you're welcome to make it.
- Try not to have everyone in the same room. Stripping away the names and using just letters proves how confusing that really is.
- Another thing that came out from stripping the names is that people refer to other characters by name in dialog far to much. Most of the time you don't need it. It sounds really silly when your using the letter - but it's probably just as silly when you're using a name.
I felt the same way, hence the approach I took to my dialogue. Frankly, I was relieved that folks didn't reject my comedic approach to my contribution.
BTW, has the Master Killer already been "chosen"? If not, when does that move happen?
E.D.
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Posted it. I'm not taking a kill for everyone's info.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/