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I think of the remaining cast, one by the name of E is of particular interest. He arrived rather late and early upon the train, came with a lot of luggage. I wonder what all was carrying?
Sandra
I never travel without several thousand of them. It's part of a marketing contract with the company. Wet Naps appear in all my productions.
E.(D.)
Gabe,
Slide your entry my way if you still need a read.
Regards, E.D.
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Hope it's satisfactory. Thanks Brett and DarrenJames. I made a bit more revisions on it before posting it.
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Everything is updated. Hope I got that right - the corridor scene was very confusing. Also fix your character slugs, Gabe, they shouldn't be lower case. But overall good job.
Up next is darrenjames and he's already used his kill.
I think this post had some quality attributes. I liked how Gabe says, "Give me the gun?" in interrogative.
I think you could have seized an opportunity here rather than have Jeff just hand it over like that. I could definitely imagine Jeff admiring the gun, playing with it as it were... Playing with a loaded gun? Yes, I think it would be his style in this script; so yes there's that.
The feeling I got from this was it tended to be a little bit too staccato. That's not always a bad thing, but perhaps you could have switched it up a bit.
I have some confusion over Darren and Seeley. Yes, I'm the weird one who could actually discern the letters because I did study the sheet that Michael provided.
I got the impression that C=darrenjames and he locked himself in sleeper 3. While Seeley(or Darren S as I called him)=DarrenJamesSeeley and he was in cold storage Tomahawked. Is that correct?
Darren S wasn't hit with an actual "tomahawk". It's a railroad tool, called a "Big STIK Tomahawk". See picture below. You may want to revise the post with the actual tool's name.
Darrenjames - C locked himself in the room. He has a gunshot wound.
DarrenJamesSeeley - Y is dead in the storage. I decided to kill him since Jeff injured him in the previous post. The mysterious killer likes to finish things.
I went back and revised the tomahawk and fixed the character slugs.
In regards to the confusion, sorry about that. I wanted some movement and also further some story lines.
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/
Darrenjames - C is locked in the room. He has a gunshot wound.
DarrenJamesSeeley - Y is dead in the storage. I decided to kill him since Jeff injured him in the previous post. The mysterious killer likes to finish things.
Ok, I know "Y". I actually don't have him on the front sheet right now for some reason, but I picked up on him easily because of solid writing with his fx work in the game.
What happened to the chef? I remember him being there as npc
Just Murdered by Sean Elwood (Zombie Sean) and Gabriel Moronta (Mr. Ripley) - (Dark Comedy, Horror) All is fair in love and war. A hopeless romantic gay man resorts to bloodshed to win the coveted position of Bridesmaid. 99 pages. https://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-comedy/m-1624410571/