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Prophets by Chad Huggins - Comedy, Adventure, Caper - Death, the leader of The Four Horsemen Of The Apocalypse, is bored and figures it's as good as time as any to bring on Armageddon. 96 pages
contest: 2010 Action On Film Festival Finalist/Writebros Software Excellence in Comedy, 2010 StoryPros International Screenplay Semi-Finalist, 2011 Hollywood Screenplay Contest Finalist, 2013 ScreenCraft Comedy Script Contest Semi-Finalist, 2013 The Happy Writers Contest Quarter Finalist, 2013 New York Screenplay Contest Finalist - pdf, format
Since you are using a line anyway - why not at least tell us a little more: e.g.,
EXT. MIDDLE OF PACIFIC OCEAN - NIGHT
or whatever is correct based on where we are.
The SOUND of HELICOPTERS hovering overhead permeates the darkness.
Another nit - but wouldn't their "lights" - rather than sound permeate the darkness. I assume they are not flying dark.
RADIO #2 (V.O.) If you do, notify immediately and deliver to Coast Guard. Heís the one who ran the ship aground.
Way too on the nose - intro that plot point more naturally as the story unfolds.
I didn't buy any of the dining hall scene - that just doesn't and wouldn't happen. It's a luxury cruise ship with attendants, guards and the like - they are not going to let a bunch of sailors run rough shod over their passengers. The entire scene was pretty unrealistic and I don't think needed. You can show them starving/in need of food - quickly eating it at their tables without making them basically pirates.
The sailorís cell phone rings.
Cell phones don't work in out at the ocean
Now onto the lab scene on page 3 and am afraid I am out. Entirely implausible. A researcher can't sneeze through his face shield - a man pushing a cart would never be let into a room like that, etc. etc. It was an entirely unbelievable scenario.
I think you need to spend some time examining the logic of your plot points - they had me leaving the story very early - maybe true of others as well