You know...I'm really surprised that Bert doesn't realize what a total douche, little boy Chazz actually is.  He's proven it since day 1 in SS.  I mean, seriously...go back and check this guy's first few posts.

And he we are over a year later, and the only difference is that he must have hit puberty and a couple puss filled growths have been mistaken for balls.

I'm just hoping that he learns how to use the quote tool next.  That would be really nice and show his growth as a writer and master reviewer.

Even with Bert telling you to shut the fuck up you can't do it.  You're a bully, Dreamscale, and I for one won't put up with your shit.  I was here commenting on the script.  Put or shut up.

Now if you or your butler Ledbutter would like to actually comment on this script, I'm interested to hear your thoughts.  Especially when I can show you 200 instances of you being harsher after reading 1 fucking page than I was after reading 30 & breezing through the rest of the script.  You're truly a piece of work.

Chazz

Chaz...

Leave me the fuck out of your issue with Jeff. I said once, I stand on what I say, nothing more. If you're too fucking dense to get that, then so be it. I told Bert that I digress. This bitch feat has nothing to do with writing.

OK Devon (and Chazz), I opened up your script to take a look and found lots of problems immediately out of the gate.

Chazz has identified some of your mistakes, and there's no reason to pound them into the ground, but there are lessons to to be learned here for both yourself and our master reviewer and superstar writer, Chazz.

Chazz has openly and continmuously put peeps down for reading a few pages and making sweeping comments on the script, saying that it's not possible to do that, unless you read the whole script - or maybe now he's actually saying the cutoff is 30 pages, or maybe it's a certain % of the entire script - Hell, I'm not sure, but maybe he'll give us his top secret formula.

Here's the deal - I can tell in a second that you're a new writer, Devon.  I can tell that your script is going to be filled with mistakes that all first time writers make, because you literally open up with a big old red flag - "We see...", followed by many more mistakes in that opening sentence and passage..

Now, if I were going into this fresh, without Chazz lurking and waiting to attack, I'd read your first page and I'd point out many of the mistakes you made and I'd tell you to make these changes throughout the script.  And, if you did, your script would be light years the better for it.  I'd also tell you to read a bunch of scripts, both Pro and here in SS.  And finally, I'd tell you to get to know some peeps in here because once you do, you'll find that many are not only willing to help, they actually want to help...and will help.

The point is this - When you read an opening passage, page, scene, whatever, and it's filled with rookie mistakes, or just mistakes, period, there's really no reason to continue on, unless you're getting paid for your services, or doing a favor for a friend.

Devon, please don't let all this BS scare you off.  Screenwriting can be tough and you need a thick skin.  Don't give up and don't back down to people like Chazz.

Best of luck.

Hahahahahahahahahahahaha - well done.

You literally talked more about me in the post and called MY STUFF BS when you're the one who has completely derailed this thread.  You're the one who came in and attacked me with literally saying NOT ONE FUCKING THING ABOUT THE SCRIPT WHOSE THREAD YOU WERE TALKING IN!!!!  You're the one who has done nothing but try to make some fucking point to me since I got here.  You, sir, are fucking douche wagon.  So how about you shut the fuck up and move on?  It's easy.  What the fuck is your problem?  Seriously.  

You wanna get rid of me?  I'm gonna be posting all over this fucking site and you can get the fuck over it.  You wanna come after me, bitch?  Come after me.  Or maybe you could do another FINAL draft of "Fade to White".  See where that gets you - what is it now...4 final drafts in 4 years?  You're doing good.  Maybe you can make people not want to read other people's scripts so they'll continue reading your piece of shit and you can be a big dog on this site.  I would write a review of that asswipe of a script but I know you'll simply dismiss every piece of advice given like you have the 100 writers who reviewed it so far.

And where did I ever one time say that I was a master reviewer or writer?!  My God, no wonder "Fade to White" is SOOOO fantastic.  You make up shit right out of thin air better than just about anyone!!!

You're a piece of work.

Hahahahahahahahahahahahaha - well done.

Devon, your script needs work.  Hopefully Dreamscale's brilliance here has helped you with your next draft.

Chazz


P.S: I can't fucking wait for Bert to shut this shit down or at least do some fucking housecleaning.  What the fuck is wrong with this site.  I actually take time to review a script and then have 2 fucking assholes derail the thread to try and get at me, and they're allowed to continue doing it?!!  What.  The.  Fuck?

Quoted from bert End it, guys.  Here.  Now.  Avoid each other if that's what it takes.

Bert asked to end it.  You didn't listen.  Do the three of you need to take a break from the site for a bit and assess your priorities?  

Don