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You will never please everyone AND as long as you get strong publicity...negative or positive by hitting emotional points...you did more than most of us can!
Congrats on the exposure....you got a future man! Rock it!
Seeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee I knew you would rock it! Congrats man!
Got around to reading this so won't repeat a lot of what has been said.
Personally I though this read well and I enjoyed it, even if a tad depressing with the occasional 'extra' shock.
I understand what they say about a lack of story but I did enjoy the agony / early relationship and I wasn't bothered by the tests she performs when they meet.
I did find it funny that she was still called agony at home. Indeed, if she had a different, normal name, that would have helped with us seeing her in new light.
In terms of suggestion, remembering I am amateur writer , the ones that come to mind are
1) I felt I wanted to see the story more about his desire and choices. It did feel that it became agony's story with him tagging along...to a degree
2) unlike script shadow I liked the winston element but agree that it needed more. I just wonder what the options could be if it was Early who wanted to turn him into a surrogate father that he could never be. The cash he had stolen, could this be an attraction. He would tell the boy when he's 18?
Antagonist- I appreciate this is a woven story of different threads but it may benefit for greater clarity on who is the antag and why we route for the boy rather than them.
Anyway, just some thoughts and all the best with the sale etc
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Thanks man. This script was an experimental project, kinda used Taxi Driver as a template in terms of structure. It was kinda a personal project, more of an arthouse type of script. Didn't expect everyone to like it, a very particular audience in mind when writing it. I'm surprised it received so much attention in the screenwriting community.
Thanks again for checking it out. Seems about 50/50... some hated it (and hated it a lot) but the ones who liked it liked it a lot. Still get emails from random people about it, which is always nice. Crossing my fingers with the green light on this... I feel it could be a cool little film w/ the right director.
Early IS the main character's name. His name is Early. Specialist is the name of a specialist who never appears in the script outside of that one page. He's called "Specialist" because, well, he's a Specialist.
The script was optioned almost three years ago. The same company has renewed the script every year since then.
I'm not a beginner writer. And though I'm not completely flawless in my craft, naming characters is not one aspect I look to as an area of concern. I DID have a film come out in theaters last year here in the States (albeit select theaters for a limited time) and it is still on Netflix now. In fact, said film was shot in your native Australia and named the number 5 Australian film of 2015.
I've been writing for about 15 years and the actual writing is automatic at this point IMO (though I could be wrong). If there were any area of concern, in regards to this script in particular, it's a matter of taste and/or the way I structured the script and/or the way I portray my characters and/or the total execution of the way the story plays out.
I've read your very brief comments on other scripts and, as a professional screenwriter, I think you need to do a little more research yourself in the field before offering poor advice. Especially to inexperienced writers. You're only going to steer them the wrong way. And, to save yourself the embarrassment, it is ill-advised to offer poor advice to seasoned writers with actual experience in a room pitching to producers.
And you should probably actually read the scripts you're commenting on rather than skimming through the moment you open the script. If you had read the opening paragraph, you'd see that the main character's name is EARLY UPCHURCH.