Ok, one sure-fire way for you to get me to look at something is to say: 'don't look'. Yes, I'm that susceptible.  

I had a quick look at the first 10 and it's not bad. I think you might want to review the opening scene slug (from memory?) where the girl is standing on a ridge - I do think that might need another/different header.

For the most part though, the first 10 reads competently enough - nice depiction of the setting, dialogue sounds natural overall, characterisations etc. Beware the dreaded ! where it's not needed...

The only thing I'd say is it reads a hellava lot like Broadchurch. Is this the reason you're telling people to steer clear and not waste their time? Or is it an altogether different crisis of 'writing' confidence?

Quoted from LC Ok, one sure-fire way for you to get me to look at something is to say: 'don't look'. Yes, I'm that susceptible.   I had a quick look at the first 10 and it's not bad. I think you might want to review the opening scene slug (from memory?) where the girl is standing on a ridge - I do think that might need another/different header. For the most part though, the first 10 reads competently enough - nice depiction of the setting, dialogue sounds natural overall, characterisations etc. Beware the dreaded ! where it's not needed... The only thing I'd say is it reads a hellava lot like Broadchurch. Is this the reason you're telling people to steer clear and not waste their time? Or is it an altogether different crisis of 'writing' confidence?

It's the ending I'm not confident about.  I don't want people to get into it, then reach the climax and think "well, most of that was pointless".

It might make some feel like they wasted their time.  

I'll have a look at that scene opening header also.

Quoted from Leegion It's the ending I'm not confident about.  I don't want people to get into it, then reach the climax and think "well, most of that was pointless". It might make some feel like they wasted their time.   I'll have a look at that scene opening header also.

Well, I'll just say one more thing. You appear, from what I've read to be a competent writer so I would stop dissuading people from reading it - unless it has the opposite effect, like it did with me.  

And, bear in mind that 'readers/reviewers' might possibly be able to offer alternate ending ideas. Just a thought. I can't complete the read right now cause I'm a bit snowed under but I suggest you leave it for a bit - at least until the OWC is over, and wait for some more feedback.

Lee, WTF!!!

I thought you said it was a sure fire shock at the climax and now you're telling me not to read it?  Damn, I'm torn now.  I was intending to read some more over the weekend but I'm not sure....

I want clarity here, do you want reads or not?  I hope you haven't had a sudden dip in confidence with this one? lol.

I was planning to read this on Sunday... let me know if you still want me to go ahead and give it a read, mate.

Apologies, guys.

I had some problems yesterday and was feeling particularly paranoid about stuff.  Not sure why, but I lost all confidence in what I do.

The ending will have impact, but it might not be all that satisfying depending on how you interpret it.

-Lee

Quoted from Leegion I had some problems yesterday and was feeling particularly paranoid about stuff.  Not sure why, but I lost all confidence in what I do.

I know that feeling, I get it every time I submit something lol.

I'll try and read some more over the weekend...no promises though

Been a while since I was on the boards.  Busy with book stuff, getting it done, slowly, a lot harder than scripts, lots of... detail, lol.  134 pages in and I've been on this 2 months.  So - Much - Work.

Anyway, come 2014 I am coming back to the boards.  Got some reads to pull through with, promised some people, I stick to my promises, they will be read.

Anyone read this recently?  Haven't been around, sorry about that.  But I am looking to push this to producer eyes in the new year.

- Lee

Hey Lee,

I still need to read this. If you still want a read, I'll get round to it next week.

Okay, book's finished and I'm back on the boards.  Just capped 418 pages worth of material in little under 5 months.  Very happy with the result...

In the midst of emailing literary agents and such, but I am back on simplyscripts.  If you need a read, hit me up.  If you want some critique, I'm here.

I entered in the OWC.  Was a tad rusty - been writing in past tense for the past 5 months, so everything's all wibbly-wobbly.

Got some reads to pull off in the OWC, since people have read mine (I will impress you eventually, Dreamscale, eventually... not yet though).

To anyone wanting to read this, stop!  I'm rewriting it as my first official project in 2014's screenwriting world.

It will be moved to the "Thriller" section under a new name once it's done.  I never did like how the ending of this panned out... like, at all.

Once it's done, it goes to the block.  

My plan this year regards:
1) Get an agent
2) Get that agent to find a publisher
3) Have my novel published
4) Get 2 features produced
5) Get at least 3 shorts produced

My standards are massive this year, but I have a feeling...

Those are my plans this year.  I have raised the bar and will seek to impress in 2014.

Hope everyone had a good holiday,
-Lee

PM me once the new version is up and I'll give it a read.