Try to avoid using voice over as crutch, keep it to the bare minium. It looks as if you're quoting directly from the book. Adaption is hard, try work out what to cut from the book. But at the same time staying true to the book as practically possible. You don't have the same luxry as a novel writer. Some hard choices will need to be made, as to what parts to chop out. Remeber your script comes first. |