Tuesday Knight confirmed.   Still waiting to hear about a couple other cool names.

Quoted from ericdickson Tuesday Knight confirmed.   Still waiting to hear about a couple other cool names.

For which role, Kim? Wouldn't she be over 10 years too old for that?

I was intrigued to read this not from the logline or title, but the comments from this thread.

The beginning is loaded with tell, in-movie camera directions (which I get due to the film) and not much horror or creep at all up to finally finding a house at about page 26. What would be interesting to film, the characters filming themselves on the way to film something unscripted? While the dialog is not bad at all, the characters seem cliche and almost token racially planted. Also, you seem to overuse the (beat) pause in your dialog, IMO.

I'm not really getting a feel for who the protagonist is, nor anybody I'd consider interesting enough to carry the first half hour.

Back to the house where you have the characters explain a beautiful nature scene, but they are creeped out by the house that you haven't given much description to and we're already past the first third of the story.

What's the deal with the BNB AIR thing? Are you promoting this?

Pg 59-60 would make a great opening scene with a variation of anonymity.

Your last third of the story cranks things up a bit. Not sure if I care enough about any characters to hope for their survival.

I think overall you back loaded this story. Add more in the start. Nothing really clear as for motive. Thia almost feels like a short.

I think that if you really believe in this story, you should add more house backstory and flesh out your characters a bit more.

Good luck and hope to check out the rewrite.

Tony

Yeah, it's been rewritten a couple times over since this upload.  Added more "in the house" scares, gave the killer's more to do and added much needed conflict between characters.  The basic concept was to send some film students into the woods without having any clear idea of what they wanted to film.  As things happen, one of them takes advantage by recording the strange goings on in the house.  This becomes their "film without a script".      

I think them not having a script to follow (thereby "no set schedule") is hurting the beginning of the movie. They need a deadline and things to overcome, which could serve to drive the first half of the film.

Hey, Eric
Nice. Solid. Logline. Some sense of the main character (crew member/student), inciting event issues while filming, and intrigue something in the basement. Page count seems short for a feature but filming could fill that.

Peeked and didn’t seen anything sticking out like a sore thumb, no huge blocks of narrative description, breaks in dialogue with description, and only camera direction comes from the character’s in the story.

I see from the comments that this is no longer the most recent draft, congrats on the sell!! Still going to look. Keep us in the loop.

BLB

http://www.imdb.com/title/tt6658702/?ref_=nm_flmg_act_1

No more Tuesday Knight.  Replaced with Angie Stevenson.  We also landed Ricky Dean Logan and Bryana Salaz.  Production starts next week.

Very noice! Best to you on this

This was very good, very well written, well paced, made for a fast read and was easy to follow and understand. It kind of reminded me a little bit of "Book of Shadows: Blair Witch 2" at the beginning of it, and then I got a vibe of "The Crazies" as well, but could be because of the title. Not that it's a bad thing either, I personally like both movies. Anyway, congrats on getting this script sold!! Can't wait to actually SEE it come to life!

Cool, man.  Thank you!  I am just now seeing this.  Appreciate it.  Although, something weird is hoing on.  Alan N. Smithee is taking directing credit for this one now (The Night Watchers) but it was Brian Farmer and his company who filmed.  Very confused by whats happening.

Quoted from ericdickson Cool, man.  Thank you!  I am just now seeing this.  Appreciate it.  Although, something weird is hoing on.  Alan N. Smithee is taking directing credit for this one now (The Night Watchers) but it was Brian Farmer and his company who filmed.  Very confused by whats happening.

Do you not have contact with anyone to ask?

Alan Smithee is a fake name when Directors have their name removed from the film because they weren't able to maintain creative control.

The reality, regrettably, is that it means it's shit and no-one wants their name on it.

That's a pity. It was a good script.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alan_Smithee

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films Alan Smithee is a fake name when Directors have their name removed from the film because they weren't able to maintain creative control. The reality, regrettably, is that it means it's shit and no-one wants their name on it. That's a pity. It was a good script. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alan_Smithee

Ouch, that sucks... I agree, it was a good script.

Quoted from Scar Tissue Films Alan Smithee is a fake name when Directors have their name removed from the film because they weren't able to maintain creative control. The reality, regrettably, is that it means it's shit and no-one wants their name on it. That's a pity. It was a good script. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alan_Smithee

Wow - didn't know that - thanks. Kind of makes me want to write a script based on the life and times of Alan Smithee

Quoted from eldave1 Wow - didn't know that - thanks. Kind of makes me want to write a script based on the life and times of Alan Smithee

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/An_Alan_Smithee_Film:_Burn_Hollywood_Burn

Someone beat ya to it lol

Damn!