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Don
Posted: August 4th, 2017, 10:16am Report to Moderator
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So, what are you writing?

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In A Pinch by Rene Claveau writing as Sebastian the Crab - Short, Drama - A woman returning home to take over her family's legacy finds it's much harder than she ever imagined. 11 pages - pdf, format

Writer’s Also Liked

The Atom and Eve by David Lambertson writing as Also Blank - Short, Drama - A woman travels through a strange and dangerous land to reach her final resting place. 12 pages - pdf, format

Red on Yellow by John Staats writing as Sir Vival - Short, Dramedy - Two Amazonian tribesmen encounter a mysterious beast destroying their forest. - pdf, format

Plight by Cam Gray writing as blank - Short, Drama - Alone, a young boy struggles with a massive storm on the Mediterranean Sea, but his real fight awaits him onshore. 10 pages - pdf, format

And the Rest

The First Step by Cameron Dueker writing as Lord Nelson - Short, Drama - With her marriage hanging on by a thread, a tired wife struggles with the limits of just how much she can take.  10 pages - pdf, format

Junkyard by Chris Shalom writing as Sylvester Ritter - Short, Thriller, Black Comedy - After a police officer chases a young black man into a junkyard, the simple pot bust gets very messy. (Warning: extremely offensive language throughout) 12 pages - pdf, format

The Last Wish by Khamanna Iskandarova writing as  - Short, Drama - A Clown tries to talk Death into letting him die in his own home 10 pages - pdf, format

Don't Look by Tyler King writing as  - Short, Horror - On the way home from her night shift at work, a young woman experiences deer, car troubles, a farmhouse, a mother with terminal cancer, her anti-social daughter, and a terrifying revelation that shocks her to the core… 10 pages - pdf, format

Mountain City by John Robbins writing as  - Short, Drama - After the tragic death of his mother, a city boy is forced to live with his estranged father in the hills of Tennessee. 9 pages - pdf, format

A Deathly Shade of Blue by Dustin Bowcott writing as Salman Rushdie - Short, Thriller - A refugee discovers that England is just like home. 9 pages - pdf, format

The Probe by Steven Clark writing as Maheetma Trausasnake - Short, Romance, Comedy - After enduring unspeakable torment at his new job, a nerdy guy finds revenge - and love - may have just crawled in his bedroom window. 12 pages - pdf, format

Did Everyone Pay Their Dues by Steve McDonell writing as  - Short, Drama - Members of a legendary rock band visit the site of their most infamous concert.   12 pages - pdf, format

White Icing In Blackwater Creek by Sandra El. Watson writing as Anonymous - Short, Drama - A teenage beauty hangs onto childhood memories in an effort to adjust to the truth of devastation caused by wildfires in her hometown. She leaves for a change of scenery and It takes a Native Indian to turn her sadness around, but the truth, in the end, she may never learn. 12 pages - pdf, format

Take 2 by Joe Gilbert Garza writing as Anonymous X - Short, Comedy - A salesman tries to sell a device from out of the past that has no use today. 9 pages - pdf, format

Life Through Death by George Willson writing as  - Short, Thriller - When a desperate attempt to rescue the leader of a resistance fails, she chooses to live through death. 11 pages - pdf, format

Shalom, Naziboy by Alex Brauck writing as  - Short, Thriller - The granddaughter of a Holocaust victim sends a quirky merc to the apartment of a German neo-Nazi, the grandson of her ancestor's murderer, to abduct him for a talk on a Jewish cemetery. 11 pages - pdf, format

The Hangman With No Name by Eric Cook writing as Cook - Short, Thriller, Drama - A man awakens handcuffed in a mysterious room. Though no recollection of how he got there, a masked duo wrongly interrogates him.  9 pages - pdf, format

The Daughter of Gore by Dan Campisi writing as Gorden Lewis - Short, Horror - A woman trying to start over in life just can't get away from the sins of her infamous dad. 12 pages - pdf, format

Don't Talk To Strangers by Mike VinSavage writing as your name here - Short, Thriller - Don't walk the streets alone. 9 pages - pdf, format

Mama Bear by Martin Cox writing as 8252017MEC - Short, Drama - When two young women marry and adopt a baby the haters gather like vultures. However, they fail to take into account the love the women have for each other and the innate ferocious defensiveness of a Mama Bear.  10 pages - pdf, format

Dream by Praneel Nand writing as some dude with a wicked haircut - Short, Mystery, Thriller - John Reaper, a hired assassin sent to the land of the rising sun is tasked with killing a mark, but he's not alone, he has the company of his alternate personality with him, a foul mouthed sadist that loves to kill. 11 pages - pdf, format




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JEStaats
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No sh*t, there I was....

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Congrats Rene! I knew you were the one to beat. Nice work!
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khamanna
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Congrats to Rene and the runner-ups. All great scripts.
My thanks to Don and Jeff. It was a cool challenge.
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Congrats to Rene, and all the participants. I only read a few but I'll check out some more this weekend. Dave, I want to be your agent for ATOM AND EVE...

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DanC
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Congrats Rene and to everyone who entered.

Dan


Please read my scripts:
http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-series/m-1427564706/

I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good.  I enjoy writing the same.  Looking to team with anyone!

Thanks
Dan
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MarkItZero
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Congrats to Rene! Also Dave, John, and Cam.

Jeff's challenge definitely brought out a lot of great dramas, three at the top. But no lesbians...


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This is one of the only times that my votes have aligned with the winners. Great work y'all -- four strong scripts at the top there!
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ReneC
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Hahaha...looks like I came back just in time to steal the win.  

Lots of great talent on display in this challenge. Jeff made us dig deep and made drama the genre of choice for a change. All in all a great OWC with a lot of fun and creative reads. And some good controversy!


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@ Rene- I knew the character limit was an obstacle in your gameplan. I've been to Dutch Harbor countless times and there's a story to be told there separate from what we all see on TV. That said, you displayed good skill for a week worth of research and ink.

@ Dave L - You continue to impress with your writing style and this is just another example of why I'm surprised youre not working in Hollywood already.

@ Staats - Never read anything of yours but I'm willing to read more. Love some of your visual storytelling techniques.

@ Mr. Gray - Terribly superb. Out of all the entries, I felt Plight is authentic and could be captivating on film. I saw some criticism in the dialogue, but I'd disagree on the argument of setting. Writing needs to be tightened up if you're considering a showcase beyond OWC, nevertheless it's a killer script and I enjoyed its thematic ending, one that I hope my own perspective resonated with your intentions.

@ Dustin - I didn't see that coming, and to be honest, the reveal you wrote Deathly Shade inserts my questions about the protag's motives in the category of "trust the artist". That still doesn't curb my interest and insight is welcome. Also, good to see ya again.

@ Clark - Hilarious stuff, keep it on paper. If for some reason all these comedies translate to you on stage at the Laugh Factory you might need intervention. Keep it coming!

I missed a few entires, I'll stagger some reads to cover them throughout the weekend. Great work and effort from all.
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Damn...I didn't even realize this was up already.  Cool!

Congrats to Rene - I'm pretty sure this was indeed the best and I'm glad the voters got it right.

Looks like a bunch of my guesses on who wrote what were correct, but I'm impressed those I called out didn't give it away.

I was almost sure Dustin wrote that Deathly Shade script, but he stuck to his guns about not entering.

Once Khamanna suggested Sandra wrote White Icing, I knew she was spot on.

And, I was almost 100% sure Dan wrote Daughter of Gore, but he too didn't reveal anything to make it obvious - and Dan, IMO, this is by far your best work here. Sure, it needs some help, but in places, it's well done.

Good job, everyone and glad most seemed to enjoy this challenge.
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CameronD
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Congrats Rene! Didn't get a chance to read yours but when I have time I will for sure!


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Cameron
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Well done Rene, a thoroughly deserved win. Twas consistently solid throughout and a cracking wee read.

And cheers for the votes ladies and gents, bit of a surprise. I really was worried I'd butchered mine. Shall explain bits and bobs in the thread as annoyingly doing a drama rather than comedy brings up questions, just glad it worked for some folk as it really ain't my scene.

Well done everyone, look forward to the next already.
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Congrats to Rene. It was my top rated script as well and stoked to see it take the top honors.  And thanks to everyone for the kind words here and the feedback on the thread re: my script. Much appreciated. Thanks to Jeff for framing the challenge and all the SS hosts - stellar.


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Great work Rene, loved the research you did for the setting. I had about 5 that I liked on an even scale and yours was one as was Dave's, John's and Cam's.



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Congrats, Rene and the rest of the bunch! Awesome job everyone.


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Congrats to the winner and the runner ups.
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Congrats to the winner
Congrats to all who entered
Congrats to Jeff and Pia and Don
Congrats to me for getting such rave reviews as .... " This shit stinks" -- "Writer you suck"  and my favorite, "Your writing is as painful as full blown hemorrhoids"

This was fun...

Luck to ALL...
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Tyler King
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Quoted from Michael
Congrats to the winner
Congrats to all who entered
Congrats to Jeff and Pia and Don
Congrats to me for getting such rave reviews as .... " This shit stinks" -- "Writer you suck"  and my favorite, "Your writing is as painful as full blown hemorrhoids"

This was fun...

Luck to ALL...


LMAO. That literally made me crack up... but in all honesty, I actually remember reading your script and liking it. Don't think I commented on it though, was going to and ended up spacing.
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Really??? You liked it??? Damn Tyler your the only one... You must be sick like me...lol
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Damn Tyler that makes two of us. Damn man
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I mean, it had its issues, that's for sure, but I think it really stood out to me because it was just way out there, much different than all the other entries. Even though it didn't meet the criteria for the OWC, I had fun reading it...mainly because you didn't take it too seriously and as a reader, neither did I. I think everyone else did, though, which was the problem for them. But I knew and read it for what it was, and enjoyed it. I can't even begin to tell you how hard you had me rolling with your descriptions lmao

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Michael
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Awesome Tyler, It was meant to be a dark comedy.  It was rushed though. I had like 6 hours ugh
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Quoted from Michael
Awesome Tyler, It was meant to be a dark comedy.  It was rushed though. I had like 6 hours ugh


Well I laughed hard, that's for damn sure, so well done. And for 6 hours, that's pretty damn good I think.
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Congratulations to Rene and all who entered. I'm sorry I didn't get chance to enter (my own fault) and I'm also sorry I didn't get to read/review all the scripts. I hope my notes were useful to those that I did.


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Sandra Elstree.
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Congratulations, Rene!

Yours was one of my favourites. Well done and memorable!

And Michael, of Don't Talk to Strangers fame:

When I started reading yours I was really getting a kick out of it, but then it fell off for me:

The only reason was it went too out there with Mother Wrench

It felt sad to me actually to stop reading because I really felt a good and funny writing style that was hitting good notes with me. So, in the future, if I were to give any advice, I'd say don't go that far. I'm definitely interested in what you come up with in the future.

Good for everyone who entered. Some very good writing on display.

Thanks to everyone!

Sandra



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DanC
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Quoted from Dreamscale
Damn...I didn't even realize this was up already.  Cool!

Congrats to Rene - I'm pretty sure this was indeed the best and I'm glad the voters got it right.

Looks like a bunch of my guesses on who wrote what were correct, but I'm impressed those I called out didn't give it away.

I was almost sure Dustin wrote that Deathly Shade script, but he stuck to his guns about not entering.

Once Khamanna suggested Sandra wrote White Icing, I knew she was spot on.

And, I was almost 100% sure Dan wrote Daughter of Gore, but he too didn't reveal anything to make it obvious - and Dan, IMO, this is by far your best work here. Sure, it needs some help, but in places, it's well done.

Good job, everyone and glad most seemed to enjoy this challenge.



Jeff,
     Thanks a lot for those kind words.  That was really nice of you.  Sorry it took so long to reply.  I've started going to a PT clinic that specializes in spinal cord and it is messing me up.  Pain has been up, but, I do have a tiny bit more of mobility...

I knew there were issues with my entry.  I was also not happy that you guessed my entry on the first guess.  I try to pride myself on writing in different genres and being hard to pick out.  

It's odd, but, again, I didn't get to tell the story that I wanted to.  The 4 person limit really hurt me.  And the other story idea that I had, a guy who gets kidnapped, I didn't think qualified as a fish out of water, so, I scrapped that one too.

I will write more for my entry there.  

Thanks again for the kind words,  congrats to Rene, the runner-ups, and everyone else who entered.

Dan


Please read my scripts:
http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-series/m-1427564706/

I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good.  I enjoy writing the same.  Looking to team with anyone!

Thanks
Dan
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