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It's Killer - OWC (currently 1496 views)
Grandma Bear
Posted: August 8th, 2018, 12:52pm
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Well... I was sort of enjoying this. I thought it was amusing, but it honestly felt like it was going to be a commercial until he stabbed her in the chest.
Not sure what else to say about this one. Not much of a story here. No dialogue, so that was good. Heat? Didn't really play a part, unless the Ghoul's face melted behind the mask.
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ReneC
Posted: August 8th, 2018, 1:33pm
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Interesting choice for the OWC. There's no story here at all, it's just a cheeky commercial ad. It technically meets the requirements, it's technically a valid entry, but not one I'll take seriously. I could see it getting made just for kicks, so there's that. Nice try though.
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Kyle
Posted: August 8th, 2018, 3:18pm
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I felt this worked well within the challenge but not sure it would as a stand alone piece. It's well written, well paced, unique and definitely one of the better ones I've read so far. Best of luck with it.
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SAC
Posted: August 9th, 2018, 9:37pm
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Writer, A commercial huh? okay. It seems to have hit the challenge requirements so no issue there. Not a real "story" but it was light in tone and fun. And the Ghoul, besides a cool drink, got what he wanted--another notch in his body count belt. Good job! Steve
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SteveUK
Posted: August 10th, 2018, 3:00pm
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Okay, so this is more of a sketch than a short, but it did make me chuckle in a couple of places. Not really a story to this so it’s hard to comment in that aspect, but you pretty much hit the criteria and this was pretty well written.
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DaveTroop
Posted: August 11th, 2018, 2:22am
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Hey writer It's good to see the front man for KISS is writing again. Welcome back. A short short. Nice one. Decent suspense, but the heat factor fell short. The comedy was pretty good. Hunk's feminine scream. The Hottie - oh you just want some water? But, when Hottie got stabbed for the IT'S A KILLER punch line, you lost me. Seems like this was someone's lesser second entry into the contest. Nice job. Good luck.
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Pale Yellow
Posted: August 11th, 2018, 10:28pm
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Love the title and I love your logline.
ok... so I about choked when I read... pregnant Python.
This reads more like a commercial than a story/screenplay.
I would've liked to see the hot dude run off screaming like a girl... and the girl bust the glass and slash the creepo's throat open though.
Good writing. Enjoyed the page count too.
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