Not sure if you were intending this to be a comedy or not, but the second I read the slug line for the funeral scene, I laughed.

You did a great job with the phobia he has up until the end. It's at this point that his germ issue went from being a phobia to being something that he was extremely cautious about ... which ended up killing him. Not sure why you veered away from this, it was working good.

Writing and pace were both great, an easy read.


Good work.

This is hilarious, but the fact that he didn't have an immune system is really a legitimate reason not to deal with anyone or anything, so I'm not sure it fits in with what  is normally referred to as a phobia. Lose the cemetery scene and give us a glimpse of the ridiculous sex scene and you have a great comedy!

Hey writer,

So, I'm on the finishing straight for the reviews here, and was worried about what I may find. Wish I'd found this one earlier.

No idea why, but I just ended up in a big smile, even at the sad ending bit!! It seemed to have some comic force that just threw me a bit. I don't really buy that he'd never told her about the phobia, but I kinda let that go and just ran with it.

In feature length, this could be the worst, most painful romcom ever. In short, it's bloody funny and for some reason and it really worked for me.

I think it's the visuals, you did a bloody good job there, and this helped you along in what is a highly unlikely premise.

I liked it, though probably for the wrong reasons!!

Cam