Good title
Well, I smiled when reading the logline: "finds his quest for answers takes him closer to the truth than he ever expected"

A sheer Picasso of saying nothing

P5 a slow burner so far – not bad at all, then, something should happen soon

I quickly rechecked the genre because this reads as a drama to me

P7 complete switch of tone here – feels like trash horror from here on…

The very last picture does not work for my taste… I like that you include the other characters in the end but the punch line must be better imo, if you eventually go that "trashy" route

It's a mixed bag for me. Until the tone shifts, I was really taking it serious to some degree and was interested what you do with his conspiracy tics. Then it all went a completely different route. I don't know: just asked myself why should I invest so much in that guy when suddenly the plotting comes out of left field and just drives over the build-up like a bulldozer.

Still, there is a lot entertainment, no doubt. But if it all ends in fun and games then better get in and out within a minimal timeframe. What else is there to learn?  Why watch this guy for so long if it ends with eyeballs popping up from his body…

Good entertainment - just not balanced yet in case of its cinematic expression.

I'd really start by cleaning up the formatting issues on page 1.

Title got my interest right away

I'd lose all the camera directions, try and find a way to show us how you want a specific moment filmed rather than add camera directions, would read much better,

I enjoyed this, a slow build up to insanity. Brookes conversation with the courier guy was good stuff as was the eyeballs popping up around his body. What I would cut however is them appearing on Greenfingers.

Good work.

I like the character. It's really authentic and complex in a delighting way.
Although I'm not a fan of the transitions between some scenes here and sometimes got lost, is this screenplay an entertaining piece after all.

Good work!