Good title, yo
Logline is teasing in favor of the genre pretty well - there's just plot and movement missing. As is, both sentences are used for equal purpose only, style.

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we already understood her "dramatic situation" and phobia, at some point it's enough. Generally, there's not much happening and I ask myself how an independent audience, away from the phobia challenge, could engage here, thematically. I don't see it, honestly said.

It's too slow and thematically marginal. But who knows perhaps the second part will shoot this one out of orbit…

You're a good writer I believe. You can deal with characters, interaction, dialogue, formatting is tidy etc…, then… sorry to say but I don't think a sunburn phobia script is a topic that works with a public audience. I don't believe in it, too absurd.

As much as I feel with her, going through her personal nightmare, restarting the therapy soon, I just don't see a true point of identification…

@ this story is clearly a drama btw

Another one with great writing.

Didn't read what the phobia was so was kinda lost, but after checking it all makes sense.

I agree with what others have said about Donna realizing it's a burn ... after that the story sinks a bit. Better to keep this from her for as long as possible I think, her reactions to not knowing what was on her arm was what made the story click for me, that should've been the focus.

Good script nonetheless.