Wonderful idea. Very creative and skillfully written. It took me some effort to keep track of so many characters at the beginning but then all paid off with the ending. I liked a lot the imagery and I think it would look awesome in a comic. Good job, writer.

Definitely not a creature feature, and too short for what this story is about. It’s all rushed to fit the page count.

Outside of the challenge, this would make a cool animated short, or even something more with the right story arranged to it. The writing is rough, it needs a lot more care and attention, but it could be a great tale. It’s too ambitious for this OWC though.

Good try, congrats on getting an entry in.

I thought this okay as a standalone story.  But I don't think this quite fits in with the theme.  That said, a few tweaks and it could if Aszrael returned as a creature.  The story was quite creative.  And reads like a scene from a much longer script.

All the best.

Ambitious idea.  Choice of characters felt a bit random - though perhaps that’s my own ignorance as to what they all represent.  A little heavy on the character count for the page constraints with a lot of talking heads that don’t deliver quite as visually as some other entries.

The ending pulled it back a notch, made me think at least so kudos for that.  Not my favourite, but that’s more down to personal preference than execution.