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dogglebe
Posted: February 2nd, 2013, 7:05pm Report to Moderator
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I just finished the first draft of a supernatural thriller.  The first draft of the first draft was 125 pages long (my shortest first draft with feature scripts).  After going back and tightening things (no real changes), the first draft is now 112 pages.  I'm hoping to cut another five or ten pages from it with more serious revisions.


Phil
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Ledbetter
Posted: February 2nd, 2013, 7:31pm Report to Moderator
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I've kinda changed my approach on the page length as of my last couple of scripts and there are advantages and disadvantage to my new approach.

I used to throw it out there, page count be dammed and then start cutting fat.

I now (as I write) go back every 20 pages, and trim what I can as I go. It's a much slower process but it forces me to revisit each scene over again and ask - does it really push the script forward?

If not, it gets chopped.

When I'm done, I still have a fat script but I don't have to go back with a meat cleaver to trim it.

Shawn.....><
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dogglebe
Posted: February 2nd, 2013, 7:36pm Report to Moderator
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Quoted from Grandma Bear
It takes a lot of courage and trust to send your VD to anyone of your friends.


Ummm.... er...

damn.

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Electric Dreamer
Posted: February 3rd, 2013, 10:38am Report to Moderator
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Quoted from Grandma Bear
My vomit drafts are exactly that. Just like the real thing. It stinks and it's often gross. It takes a lot of courage and trust to send your VD to anyone of your friends. Just like you don't call attention to your vomit either...if you've thrown up that is.  


Yeah, you're always apologizing for the thing twenty times before you even send it.
Like Phil, I trim the heck out of the protein spill before anyone sees it.

Clone Wife, for instance, vomited out at 122 pages.
I sliced out a dozen pages before anyone saw it.
Not story or scenes. just being more precise with my storytelling.
Subsequent drafts ranged from 95 to 111 pages.

E.D.


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wonkavite
Posted: February 3rd, 2013, 4:30pm Report to Moderator
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With me, a scene tends to go through two-three iterations before it even reaches the status of "First Draft".

It usually goes something like this:

Sketching out a hand-written "vomit draft" while on the subway.  (It's a great way to pass the time, and ensures me a minimum two hours per day of writing.)  Then refining and retyping it into Final Draft when I get home.  

Alternatively - when I have access to it - I may actually write the scene in MS Word first.  Then it gets cut and pasted into Final Draft, and re-typed line by line.

Then - once I've done a few scenes - I tend to go back and chisel a bit before moving on...

Mind you, that's all done with an outline already in place.

Leads to a really quick and semi-clean first draft, written with "vomit draft" speed. Though very, very, very far from the finished product!
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dogglebe
Posted: February 3rd, 2013, 9:23pm Report to Moderator
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Quoted from Grandma Bear
I'll send my VD to Screenplay Readers then.



ewwww


Phil

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Ledbetter
Posted: February 4th, 2013, 3:18pm Report to Moderator
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Quoted from Grandma Bear
My vomit drafts are exactly that. Just like the real thing. It stinks and it's often gross. It takes a lot of courage and trust to send your VD to anyone of your friends. Just like you don't call attention to your vomit either...if you've thrown up that is.  


I feel kinda self conscious having you read my VD right about now.  

Shawn.....><
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khamanna
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We post our vomit drafts here on 7WC. Then we collectively vomit more vomit on them creating a big valuable stink!
As an author I always appreciate some vomit on my vomit.
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jwent6688
Posted: February 5th, 2013, 6:15pm Report to Moderator
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Doesn't anyone here use the corkboard and index cards? I just hung one up. It has three pieces of masking tape on it equally spaced. Act One, Two, and Three.

I've never tried this before. My first feature was a logic disaster. So far I've got three darts stuck in it, but I'm becoming better at dart tossing.

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Quoted from jwent6688
Doesn't anyone here use the corkboard and index cards?
James


        



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Ledbetter
Posted: February 5th, 2013, 7:13pm Report to Moderator
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White board and EXPO pens for me...

Problem is...

I worked on COSMIC JUSTICE so long, the ink won't come off.

Shawn.....><
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Gary in Houston
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I have been using an app on my Ipad called Index Cards, which allows you to type out scenes and notes on virtual index cards and then easily move those cards around.  The best part was that it only cost like 99 cents and I can store as many projects on it as I want (if I were prolific, which I'm not).

I wish I could write a vomit draft.  I seem to suffer from a disorder that compels me to edit a scene to death before I move to another scene.  Consequently, I am the world's slowest writer.  But when I finally finish this feature...look out!


Some of my scripts:

Bounty (TV Pilot) -- Top 1% of discoverable screenplays on Coverfly
I'll Be Seeing You (short) - OWC winner
The Gambler (short) - OWC winner
Skip (short) - filmed
Country Road 12 (short) - filmed
The Family Man (short) - filmed
The Journeyers (feature) - optioned

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Quoted from khamanna
...I always appreciate some vomit on my vomit.


I couldn't help but to picture, Chunk, telling "everything" to the Fratellis.

I can't do a vomit draft.  I need the structure of an outline to make sure I even have a story worth telling.

I may have a few cool scenes in my head, but I don't want to waste time trying to vomit out a feature based on those scenes, only to find out that I have no story.

Jordan


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SOCIAL EXPERIMENT 8pg-Drama
THE BRIDGE 8pg-Horror
SCHEISSE 6pg-Horror/Comedy
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dogglebe
Posted: February 6th, 2013, 1:07pm Report to Moderator
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I have the story in my head before I start writing.  I usually don't follow it that closely, but it's there.


Phil
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Ledbetter
Posted: February 6th, 2013, 1:21pm Report to Moderator
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Mmmmm...

A story, eh?

In 2013, the acid reflux war raged on…

In an attempt to gain control, Captain Larynx enacted the vomit draft

Unwitting young bits of food were thrown up to the front lines

Where they ultimately were met with projectiles…

Sounds like a good little tale.

Shawn…..><
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