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Forgive
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 4:58pm
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Holy cr@p! That's the look!!
He stares at her with the same look that his dog gives to him when he's eating steak. Nice. Filmable too.
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Dreamscale
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:00pm
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CLOSE on Tom, looking at Summer like the way a dog stares at a steak.
YES!!! Perfect!!!
OR
CLOSE on Tom, as he drools, looking at Summer the way a dog stares at a steak....or the way a cat stares at a bird...or the way Stevie looks at all women, while wearing his short denim shorts.
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RayW
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:10pm
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mmmarnie
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:16pm
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Quoted from Dreamscale
YES!!! Perfect!!! OR CLOSE on Tom, as he drools, looking at Summer the way a dog stares at a steak....or the way a cat stares at a bird...or the way Stevie looks at all women, while wearing his short denim shorts.
CLOSE on Tom, as he drools, looking at Summer who looks at Stevie, in his short denim shorts the way she looks at a plump, juicy hot dog before she takes her first bite.
boop
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stevie
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:16pm
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CLOSE on Jeff, looking at his newly acquired flock of sheep the way chicks around the world check out Aussie guys
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Dreamscale
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:30pm
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stevie
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:45pm
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CLOSE on Jeff as he cracks open a newbie script. He gazes at the fucked up first opening slug like the Niners D drool at the sight of a weakened Packer O line
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rendevous
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:45pm
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Quoted from Dreamscale
Nice!! I love sheep!!
I think we've always suspected as much.
Do you need a muzzle?
R
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stevie
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 5:46pm
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I think we've always suspected as much. Do you need a muzzle? R
He takes the muzzle off, RV. It's easier for the sheep to kiss him
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Dreamscale
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 7:25pm
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He takes the muzzle off, RV. It's easier for the sheep to kiss him
No muzzles...I like 'em natural!
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TimWestland
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 7:35pm
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The author of Jowls started out doing this in a fun way... then quickly beat the shit out of the concept. What a waste. A little goes a long way. Use it sparingly and you create a voice. Use it too much and you end up with a tiresome script which draws attention to the writer at the expense of the story.
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Dreamscale
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 8:03pm
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The author of Jowls started out doing this in a fun way... then quickly beat the shit out of the concept. What a waste. A little goes a long way. Use it sparingly and you create a voice. Use it too much and you end up with a tiresome script which draws attention to the writer at the expense of the story.
I agree, Tim, and that's really my overall point about staying the fuck away from them
In terms of Jowls, I guess it depends on exactly what you mean by "started out doing this in a fun way...then quickly beat the shit out of the concept" - because, again, I agree, but for me, it was really, really quickly that it got annoying, and the fact that so little was going on, made it all the more apparent.
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oJOHNNYoNUTSo
Posted: April 14th, 2014, 8:03pm
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The author of Jowls started out doing this in a fun way... then quickly beat the shit out of the concept. What a waste. A little goes a long way. Use it sparingly and you create a voice. Use it too much and you end up with a tiresome script which draws attention to the writer at the expense of the story.
I just pictured you saying this on the Food Network.
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