I think Don should charge subscription prices

But no, I standby what I said. I think you have to go through a process and you kind of understand where you are in the world before you begin to write about it.
Noq quite what i meant.
Umm sorry . I think more fee "will and happiness, but its great to experience bad times to write about good times.

I want to be more positive

Its difficult when you are working on horrof films 24/.7

I was actually thinking it is overwritten... lol.

Code Malorie bends down, cups her hands... And transfers the bird to a shoebox.

No need for 'down'. Nor any need for the overly dramatic 'And' followed by ellipses.

Code It coos at her as she covers the box and hefts it.

Why can't it just coo?

Code Malorie then picks up her blindfold. Before donning it, she looks around.

Before donning it? Unnecessary. Especially as it will be donned two action blocks down.

Code Inside, all is quiet and still. A land-line phone sits on the coffee table.

Why not call it a house phone?

Code Nothing else around it. As if it were a holy relic.

Should be all one sentence.

Code Reaches out and grips the door handle.

No real need for 'reaches out'.

It is what it is.

As much everybody wants to "modifiy it" it: it works/worked just fine.

Writers needs to just get a grip and adapt. Nothing wrong with that at all.

I've never had an issue about punctuality, despite what others say. It's insane. People that fund these films don't just give you a million quid. They want to use you for a reason. The last thing they care about are the things that Dreamscale worries about. He's always worried about being introduced to the scene -- well , fuck that buddy!  Well past that. He's thinking it's all strippers and pussy -- wrong game.

It is hard work, but if you have talent, ambition and can provide this on daily basis, then yes.


It kinda helps to keep believing in what you always dreamed of. Keep your dreams alive, but never get too down when u get hurt!!!

Yeah I agree small things are looked over for the benefit of the over all story... but editing is a very important part of the process. If it isn't done right in the action then the dialogue will follow suit. There may be too much of it which will ruin the end result.

The script is the most important part of the whole film. Everything else comes afterwards. I'm with Jeff in that it should be pristine perfect before ever being considered for production. Unfortunately, most scripts aren't edited very well and this shows in the end result. I'm constantly looking over poor dialogue etc in features just to get to the end. The rare ones are pristine and they always make money.

I think that's why I'm veering more towards being a film maker myself. I just can't trust anyone else to do it right. I could sell my perfectly good script to someone and they fuck it right up.

Just keep doing what you are doing.

Have great faith in you, man.

Hi guys,

Think you know what's coming here...

I would like to apologize to the people of this thread for what can only be described as "trolling". I apologize if I offended anyone or singled anyone out for whatever reason. I haven't actually read what I wrote, can't handle the embarrassment right now, but I had a "flashback" earlier today and immediately knew I'd made a mistake (or several) over the weekend.
It must have been Saturday night/Sunday morning. I enjoyed a few alcoholic beverages. Somehow made it home, went online instead of going to bed, and then proceeded to visit this site. Never a good idea. I'd put this down as a schoolboy error, but I do have previous, so perhaps a ban would be sufficient.

I don't know what gave me such an ego that I thought it was right to say what I did, or slate other people's opinions. I can't keep blaming the booze, especially since I have a pretty high tolerance level. So, I can only put it down to me just being a dickhead/douchebag/ anything else that springs to mind.

I think a ban would be a good idea. Hopefully not a permanent one.  I need to slap myself back down to earth from whatever cloud I'm currently floating on. Hopefully if/when I return I will be able to actually contribute to the site instead of piping in every few months with needless and worthless comments that are derogatory to members who actually give something positive.

Regarding the topic of the thread, I actually don’t mind the style, can understand the purpose, but I can also see why it might grate on other readers.

Quoted from Scoob It must have been Saturday night/Sunday morning. I enjoyed a few alcoholic beverages. Somehow made it home, went online instead of going to bed, and then proceeded to visit this site. Never a good idea.

Ah, see never drink/post not a good idea.

Quoted from Scoob I'd put this down as a schoolboy error, but I do have previous, so perhaps a ban would be sufficient.

I don't think anyone requires a ban. Didn't you say you'd been working on a horror movie? Maybe some meditation is in order.   Relax.

~Several, some in UK, some in US, most in europe because of the expense!

But yeah, it's a bit of a nightmare. I can;t be in tewnty five places at once, so you cant really adapt. Its just constant...
I just needed a little reality check...

I FUCKING KNEW IT!!!  The booze...  I remember your drunken tirades from another message board   I can always tell when you're drunk - you double post, and triple post, over and over, nonstop.  I can see how others would get annoyed, but I never cared.  I always liked ya, never had a problem.  It's over and done with, though, so don't worry about it.

Ahhg, i I'm getting obvious. Not good!
I lost the job I wanted the most, which I think you know what it is -- so that hurts. Hurts so bad! Just have to get better!
Next time!

I got banned in 2009, if we are talking about the same site, haha. I displayed a lack of enthusiasm for Rob Zombie being appointed director of Halloween II. Funnily enough, I quite like the film and think Rob Zombie is a great guy.

There was this script on last year's Black List called Sovereign. Had the exact same style as this, which means it's starting to catch on or else we wouldn't be seeing it again. Here's a sample --

"Reveal DMITRI ROMAN (30s). Goes by Roman.
Sharp features.
Kind eyes.

Roman sits in a chair.
Beautiful oak hardback.

Wears a tux.
Bow tie undone.
Looks at the screen with concern.
He’s with his wife: ALYOSHA. Aly for short."

I think it works a lot better here as the sentences at least don't read like scribblings a child would write, which is probably the harshest thing I can say about the style. "Boy does this, boy does that" is tiresome and a little 'cringey' to read. But if there's a reason to do it, I won't flame the writer. Once I find some spare time, I'll give Bird Box a try. And to be very honest, Sovereign wasn't a half bad script. I think the example Pia gave from the script would've worked a lot better if the sentences didn't feel so disjointed and were at least grammatically correct.

It's pretty awkward to read. Looks more like a poem than a script.

Ironically, I do like the Alien excerpt.   Maybe I'm biased.  

I guess Alien is the exeption to the rule, but I hope this poem-script format doesn't catch on.