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One thing to remember about the 1+6WC scripts is that most of them when first posted are pretty much first drafts. Most people go on to do rewrites after feedback. From what I saw, it was a decent bunch of scripts entered. I didn't enter mine, but it has been optioned and is slated for production in 2015. What might seem cliche' to some, might be exactly what the producers were looking for.
If I remember correctly, Deep In The Bone had no agents of any kind. It was about a doctor trying to save his son.
"we should never write with a mentality like that" But that's what the whole 1+6WC was about. Prod-cos were looking for a thriller with a race against time with the lead in his 50s....
If we want to be produced, we have to write what people are looking for.
I'm sorry but I just thought they were all the same. Non-stop action that got tiresome after 10 pages...protagonists thrown into shit right from page 1 with no development of any character...CIA Agents, FBI Agents, DEA Agents, Ex-agents, terrorists...it was all just so boring. Yeah, what might seem cliche to some might be exactly what a producer is looking for, but we should never write with a mentality like that, unless someone pays you to write like that, then it's fine.
Please let us know what you have written so we can take a look and keep up with the greats. I'm sure your material is just brimming with originality. Producers? Pfft? Who needs them? Originality is what it's all about!
Why write for producers when you can write original material!? Who, what writer, in any state of mind, would ever aim to write for their script to be produced?
Crazy talk.
Seriously, "reviewers" like you are just people that say " I've seen this film before" a million times over and over again. Yes. It's likely to remain that way. Not just because of lack of originality, but in order to make a movie it costs a lot of money, requires a shitload of people, and to get distribution? It takes more than a storyspinner to wind that deal.
I think you underestimate what scriptwriters are trying to do here. As if everyone is going to write some magical Steven Spielberg shit on their first draft.
I don't understand people like you, slating writers, and asking for "excellence" and "originality" as if to please you. Who the fuck are you? Or more to the point, who do you think you are?
"I would try a new approach" .... fuck off. You've never been there, don't criticize something you don't know.
It's all good. We're just trying to find a script everyone will agreed to review. This wasn't about you. I still think a TV script would be good. I didn't watch TV shows for years because, well, they sucked big time, but in the last few years, it seems the best writing is on television. Sons of A, Walking Dead, Breaking Bad, True Detective...
Deep in the Bone by Rick Equal Retribution by Shawn Ryan's horror that I've read but don't know the current title of Michael Kospiah's script True Detective TV pilot
Script Club is something we've done every now and then in the past. We pick a script, either pro or from one of us here and then we discuss all the aspects of it. Story, characters, dialogue, pace and things like that. Trying to figure out what works, what doesn't. What can be improved and the occasional, how the hell did this script ever get greenlit by a studio??????
I'd discuss Equal Retribution or Deep in the Bone, personally.
I remember reading Shawn's 'Equal Retribution' and LOVING the living hell out of it because it was one of those outstanding redemption scripts with a supernatural twist.
Deep in the Bone I think I finished too, Doctor goes after the Mob to get Bone Marrow from the Mob Boss' son to save his own son from dying. This one I recall enjoying too.
Not sure about the others. Never heard of True Detective either...
If we're doing horror, my vote goes to "Home" by Adam Alleca. It's probably the best recent horror script most people haven't read. Alleca wrote the remake of Last House on the Left, and this script was optioned by Wes Craven's company.
The logline, without giving much away, is "A paranoid delusional man is left on house arrest out in the middle of the woods." It's best to go into it blind, though. It's truly a great script and it's a shame it hasn't been made. It will make you happy, Zack.