How do I get my film's link and banner here?
All screenplays on the simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Users Browsing Forum
No Members and 5 Guests
Pages: 1
Author
An action line across two scene headings? (currently 561 views)
Steven
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 4:47pm
New
Location Southern California
Posts 466
Posts Per Day 0.15
Here is an example of what I'm going for, and I'm a bit confused. EXT. BALL FIELD - DAY Powell steps out of the box, adjusts his grip and steps in again. The delivery - breaking ball-- EXT. OLD BASEBALL STADIUM - HOME PLATE - NIGHT --swing and a miss. OR EXT. BALL FIELD - DAY Powell steps out of the box, adjusts his grip and steps in again. The delivery - breaking ball-- --A grown up Powell swings and misses. EXT. OLD BASEBALL STADIUM - FIELD - NIGHT Now mid 30s, he smacks his helmet with is bat, obviously frustrated.
JEStaats
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 4:54pm
Old Timer
No sh*t, there I was....
Location Tucson, AZ
Posts 1735
Posts Per Day 0.62
I find that they're both confusing. Is he a boy in one and a 30 year old in the other? This may be a time when you DO use a transition direction for a Time-Cut. As it is, I think more information is needed.
Logged
Reply: 1 - 7
Steven
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 4:57pm
New
Location Southern California
Posts 466
Posts Per Day 0.15
I find that they're both confusing. Is he a boy in one and a 30 year old in the other? This may be a time when you DO use a transition direction for a Time-Cut. As it is, I think more information is needed.
I want to show the transition between Powell as a child to an adult, in one pitch. He's at bat as a child, then strikes out as an adult...I'm just having trouble showing that on paper.
Reply: 2 - 7
JEStaats
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 5:18pm
Old Timer
No sh*t, there I was....
Location Tucson, AZ
Posts 1735
Posts Per Day 0.62
Maybe something like this: EXT. SANDLOT BALL FIELD - DAY Powell (12) steps out of the box, adjusts his grip and steps in again. The delivery - breaking ball-- EXT. OLD BASEBALL STADIUM - HOME PLATE - NIGHT --swing and a miss. Now mid 30s, Powell smacks his helmet with his bat, obviously frustrated.
Logged
Reply: 3 - 7
Steven
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 5:20pm
New
Location Southern California
Posts 466
Posts Per Day 0.15
Maybe something like this: EXT. SANDLOT BALL FIELD - DAY Powell (12) steps out of the box, adjusts his grip and steps in again. The delivery - breaking ball-- EXT. OLD BASEBALL STADIUM - HOME PLATE - NIGHT --swing and a miss. Now mid 30s, Powell smacks his helmet with his bat, obviously frustrated.
That's essentially what I did in the OP, but I left out Powell's introduction prior to this spot mentioning that he's young, playing with kids.
But ok, thanks, I'll probably just leave it.
Reply: 4 - 7
eldave1
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 7:30pm
January Project Group
Location Southern California
Posts 6874
Posts Per Day 1.93
JE was right - confusing since we don't know it is a younger Powell. But now you tell us you intro'd him earlier - so the second example you used would be better, IMO. Also - I would name the first field EST. LITTLE LEAGUE FIELD - DAY Just adds even more clarity about this being for youngsters
Reply: 5 - 7
Steven
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 9:01pm
New
Location Southern California
Posts 466
Posts Per Day 0.15
JE was right - confusing since we don't know it is a younger Powell. But now you tell us you intro'd him earlier - so the second example you used would be better, IMO. Also - I would name the first field EST. LITTLE LEAGUE FIELD - DAY Just adds even more clarity about this being for youngsters
I hate that I’m adding even more context, should have included it all in the first place. But I established that the kids are playing on a run down field, no baselines, kind making do with what they have. There is also some narration from older Powell!
Reply: 6 - 7
eldave1
Posted: September 5th, 2017, 9:26pm
January Project Group
Location Southern California
Posts 6874
Posts Per Day 1.93
I hate that I’m adding even more context, should have included it all in the first place. But I established that the kids are playing on a run down field, no baselines, kind making do with what they have. There is also some narration from older Powell!
Okay Dokay
Reply: 7 - 7
Pages: 1
Locked Board
Board Index Screenwriting Class [ previous | next ]
Switch to:
News Questions or Comments Site Redesign Screenwriting Class Simplyscripts Collaborative Effort Review My Logline Script Review Exchange My Work In Progress Contests - Screenwriting and Filmmaking Writing Opportunities and Call for Scripts The 2020 Writers' Tournament The 2019 Writers' Tournament The 2018 Writers' Tournament The Business Of Scripts Queries and Pitches Options and Contracts Agents, Managers, and Lawyers Copyright Action/Adventure Scripts Comedy Scripts Drama Scripts Dramedy Scripts Family Scripts Horror Scripts Romantic Comedy Sci Fi and Fantasy Scripts Series Thriller Scripts Western Scripts Short Scripts Short Action / Adventure Scripts Short Comedy Scripts Short Drama Scripts Short Dramedy Scripts Short Horror Short Romantic Comedy Scripts Short Sci Fi and Fantasy Scripts Short Family Scripts Short Thriller Scripts Short Western Radio and Stage Plays 1Q '24 OWC Halloween 2023 One Week Challenge September '23 OWC August '23 OWC July 2023 OwC April '23 OWC A 'Quickie' Challenge Halloween 2022 One Week Challenge Summer Quickie April 2022 OWC One Queue Twenty-Two The Placeholder 2021 Challenge December 2021 One Week Challenge November, 2021 OWC The Halloween 2021 One Week Challenge The September 2021 OWC The August 2021 OWC The July, 2021 OWC The June 2021 Challenge The May 2021 Challenge The April 2021 Challenge February, 2021 One Week Challenge December 2020 One Week Challenge Halloween 2020 One Week Challenge September, 2020 One Week Challenge June, 2020 One Week Challenge May, 2020 Challenge March Challenge January 2020 - One Week Challenge October, 2019 One Week Challenge The August Challenge April, 2019 One Week Challenge January 2019 - One Week Challenge The Night Gallery 7 Week Challenge October 2018 One Week Challenge July 2018 One Week Challenge May 2018 One Week Challenge January 2018 Two Week Challenge October 2017 One Week Challenge The Quickie Challenge July 2017 OWC April 2017 OWC Scarefest Script Club January 2017 One Week Challenge October 2K16 One Week Challenge August 2016 One Week Challenge April 2016 OWC January 2016 OWC October 2015 One Week Challenge 2015 7 Week Challenge May, 2015 One Week Challenge February 2015 One Week Challenge October 2014 One Week Challenge 2014 One + 6 Week Challenge April 2014 One Week Challange January 2014 - One Week Challenge October 2013 One Week Challenge July 2013 One Week Challenge March, 2013 1+6WC End of the World One Week Challenge October 2012 One Week Challenge February 2012 OWC December, 2011 Urban Legend OWC October, 2011 One Week Challange September 2011 One Week Challenge June 2011 One Week Challenge February 2011 One Week Challenge October, 2010 One Week Challenge May 2010 One Week Challenge February, 2010 One Week Challenge October, 2009 One Week Challenge August 2009 One Week Challenge April, 2009 One Week Challenge January, 2009 Two Week Challenge October, 2008 One Week Challenge July 08 One Week Challenge February, 2008 One Week Challenge October '07 One Week Challenge Short Sci Fi - January 07 One Week Challenge July/August 2007 One Week Challenge Short Comedy - April '07 One Week Challenge Short Horror - October 06 One Week Challenge Movie, Television and DVD Reviews Script Reviews Music Reviews and Discussion General Chat Movie/Television Rumor Books Poetry Getting to know you, getting to know all about you... Things you are looking for March Madness 2018 Stephen King - All about the King Fiction– There Are Other Worlds than These Non-Fiction - To Write is Human, to Edit is Divine Adaptations – Here’s Johnny! Stephen King Collectors and Shelfies
Forum Rules
You may not post new threads You may not post replies You may not post polls You may not post attachments
HTML is on Blah Code is on Smilies are on