Thanks Bert. I'm pretty happy with it the way it is so I'm not gonna touch it. Thanks for reading.

Shameless plug...

For anyone who enjoyed this short, episodes one and two of Matt Among the Pigeons can be found in the series section. I'd appreciate some more feedback before I rewrite it as a feature.

Wow, that was pretty disturbing!  It's one of those pieces that leaves a little pain in your gut because of just how disturbing it is.  Short and sweet.  If this was longer than 10 pages I would have criticized you for the descriptions but the way you have it works very well.  I could see this as an opening to a feature, maybe a flashback or something, but overall it was a powerful piece!  Good job!

Thanks Greg, glad you enjoyed it

I loved it. Very economical storytelling, if you know what I mean. I would seriously consider shooting it. What would it take for me to shoot this story.

Glad you liked it, MNO. If you're seriously interested in producing, send me a PM or an email with a little info about yourself.

Thanks

For anyone who's interested, this has been produced by an Australian director named Andrew Babington. You can watch it here:

http://homepage.mac.com/andrewbabington/iMovieTheater2.html

For some reason I'm credited under 'Special Thanks'. I'm disputing that at the moment.

Anyway, hope you enjoy.

How cool.  I can't wait until I get on my other computer (the one with SOUND, haha).

But "Special Thanks"?  What a knucklehead this guy must be.  I'm outraged.

I watched this film. Pretty good. In some ways it would have been better sticking to your script and in other ways it was improved. The music was good and the graphics between some scenes were a nice touch.

That said, however, the whole “special thanks” thing is a terrible insult. Not only did they do that, they put you in with a group of others. It appears that everyone except the director and actors were done this way.

There’s a valuable lesson to be learned here. When you talk about “writer’s credit,” it needs to be made clear that you expect the credits to specifically say “written by” or something tantamount.

Congratulations on your achievement.

It was good for what it was, but I think they should have stuck to your original setting in the script.  Night, rainy, nice dinner I believe it was.  Echoing everyone else, it kind of looked like the filmmaker was trying to make the credits as short as possible, so they give their name, the actors, then everyone else.  However your name should have been given its own credit since it's someone else adapting your work.  How was this script discovered?

Anyway, it's still good to see a script on here adapted to film, so congrats.

Thanks guys. It's nice to get something produced but the way it happened has left a sour taste in my mouth. I had almost zero email contact from this guy. The last email I received was a few stills he sent me on the day of the shoot. Since then I've had nothing. I only found the completed film after googling for his website. What annoys me is that since I gave him permission to use the script (with full credit as a condition) I've turned down three other people interested in producing it.

Anyway, a lesson learned I suppose.

Mate if I was you I'd be gutted!
Not only does the guy have the cheek of barely mentioning your credit, but he's also done a pretty shoddy job of converting what i thought was a fantastic little script.

The way i pictured it when i read it, it could have fit in nicely as a scene from Sin City or something equally gritty and film noir. The film this guy's produced (because of the music and actors) is more a cheesy after-school special.

It's a shame, it's something i'd have loved to work on.

Still, keep up the good work and make sure you suss-out prospective producers before selling next time!

Martin, wow, this was the first script of yours that I read!!! Seems like a lifetime ago  

First off, I didn't realise that it had been produced, as I was probably shivering in a tent somewhere surrounded by killer bears, but, CONGRATS for that!

Second of all, I checked out the short film and think Andrew did a fairly decent job of 'Anniversary' actually. Like Greg, I really think it would have been better had the darkness, rain etc been captured, but I know that would have been hard to achieve.

Nevertheless, regardless of the way he credited you poorly, I'm sure I'd be offended too, it still is fantastic that it generated this much interest. I hope you don't feel too down about having had other producers approach you about it, because what's stopping you from giving it another go later on with someone else? It doesn't sound like you can't give it another go, unless you sold your rights away. If you did, then you'll have learnt a lot from this, but the road is wide open for all your other work.

Either way, I don't want you to feel negatively about it. Be proud that you've written a fantabulous script and that it's also been produced too, in such a short space of time.

Best of luck to you should another production opportunity arise, and of course, good luck with all your other excellent work too. I personally want to see 'Universe Explained' made, but sheesh, that really would be HARD to pull off!

Really am happy for you  

Andy x

Thanks Andy, and Pete.

Since you mention it, this may well be produced again in the near future. I'm awaiting storyboards from a director who seems to have a decent budget. I'm told there will be a rain machine involved this time around.

I'm not counting my chickens just yet, but we'll see what happens.

Quoted from tomson 3: What's a "snooker hall"?

Its a game like Pool only a larger table and longer cues.. The balls are single colored with a trangle full of red balls and certain colored balls placed at the other end of the D (Dee) and some oher colored balls placed on dots down the center of the table.. Colored balls are Blue, Brown, Green and Yellow.. A white balls is refered to as the cue ball, you use this to cue to a colored ball using the cue stick, for the use of a better wording..

The highest break (points) you can achieve in a game of snooker is 127 points..

You can gain even more points if your opponent makes foul shots because 4 points are awarded to the opposite player for hitting a foul ball.. So you can make as many 4 points from missed shots and add this to your total winning number..

A Highest break is a snooker player potting all the balls in one session without the opponent ever getting to play on the table in that particular game..

It's an English game, used to be played by Gentlemen but the game became popular and like Pool Halls, the game is played by members at a Snooker Hall..

There is a World Championship for snooker and the purse is quite a considerable amount of money.. The Yearly winner can earn a lot of money with product endorcements and such..

Some people say when you can't get out of a tight spot "You are snookered", this comes from a particular stategic shot made by one player were the white ball is hidden behind another ball for example preventing a way out of a clear shot, any attempt for the opponent to make his shot and he misses by being snookered means he will produce a foul and 4 points are awarded to his opponent..

I think Black-balled maybe derived from snooker too? Maybe pool?

Here's some more terms:

"In the Frame"
"Snookered"
"Blackballed"
"In-Off"
"Screwball"
"Followed Through"

Interesting one can come up with this stuff just out of your head...