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Astonishing by Patrick Sweeney - Short, Horror, Comedy - A spunky young witch and her wisecracking sidekicks uncover an astonishing family secret while battling a zombie apocalypse. Plus, bunnies! 5 pages - pdf, format
This is an interesting story. It made for an entertaining read. I did feel it ended kinda suddenly. Jen discovers she has the same power as her grandpa and as soon as she discovers her power the zombies are gone.
I think you could have experimented here by having Jen kill the zombies by accident, where she's trying to get use to her new found powers. Could of made for a funnier ending.
This was a funny, nice story. Probably one of the nicest zombie film/script I've seen/read. Your descriptions were spot-on, and so was the dialogue. It was funny, ha ha. Though I hope you didn't copy your short story word for word. Usually if you want to convert a short story to a script, there's always the opportunity to expand it, like Javier wanted. Add more stuff to Jen's background of being a witch rather than just saying that she's a witch.
The ending was funny. I thought that zombie rabbits would pop out, but the ending was just as good
I just read over the script 'Seven for a Secret' by Brad Huffman-Parent (bradhp) and his opening description reads
'The attic is dusty and barren. A shaft of sunlight from a lone window illuminates a corner. In the corner rests a large trunk'.
Yours starts with
'The attic is dusty and barren. A shaft of sunlight from a lone window illuminates a corner. In the corner rests a large trunk plastered with railway stickers.'
SPOOKY? or is something going on here?
Anyway on with my review...
A zombie script with no blood and guts, makes a nice change. I thought this was a nice little script. The ending was funny with all the rabbits. Sorry I wanna say more but I'm still freaked by the start lol.
Anyway I liked this.
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'The attic is dusty and barren. A shaft of sunlight from a lone window illuminates a corner. In the corner rests a large trunk'...is something going on here?
We have picked up a few more transplants from Movie Poet, Alffy.
Last month's contest was to begin your 5-page script with that opening line.
There will be a few more "trunk" scripts floating around, I suspect, as Z pulled another top-finish over there.