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Read through this a couple of times but can't really find much to say. As an Easter script I think it works well.
The line of dialogue that I found confusing, and I think the one other people are referring to, is "You found thee lookalike!" Is that just a simple typo, with 'thee' instead of 'the'? Because that's much simpler than some of the biblical references I was trying to link it to.
I notice you said the title didn't really fit - I agree. Who exactly has been reborn here? Can't think of a better one off the top of my head, though!
The line of dialogue that I found confusing, and I think the one other people are referring to, is "You found thee lookalike!" Is that just a simple typo, with 'thee' instead of 'the'? Because that's much simpler than some of the biblical references I was trying to link it to.
I intentionally used 'thee' as it's used in the bible.
Hello Jayrex. I just read this. Sorry for the delay.
Right of the bat, I noticed your descriptions were EXTREMELY vague, even for screenwriting standards. 'Straight-forward' is one thing, 'empty' is something else entirely.
You never describe the scenery nor any of the characters (but then again, your characters are popular biblical figures, so I don't think they're particularly necessary).
That was probably intentional, but I do think it detracted from the overall reading experience. Right at the beginning -- "JUDAS speaks to JESUS" -- cool. But we know they're talking because, well, we're reading their dialogue. Just give a two sentence description of the tavern instead.
Remember, even though descriptions are supposed to be vague in screenwriting, setting up a scenery helps create a mood for the reader -- it highlights the scene better.
I'm probably being too critical -- I know this was written for fun and I know you're aware of these things. But I still think you could've done a better job on a technical level, regardless of its light-hearted nature.
On the bright side, I did enjoy it. There were no big laughs for me but I had a warm feeling about it throughout regardless. Judas being a pimp made me chuckle. It made my day better, actually. So thanks for that.