Will,

Good looking production and clever premise, congrats.

E.D.

Nice movie. Funny! And good script too.

I think you need to work on the dialog, I noticed the actors didn't sound sincere at all at the beginning - the first two pages perhaps. They are too pompous at the beginning and I understand that's what you wanted but the actors obviously struggled with it.
At first I thought that the actors are green but they are not, the rest of it seems to flow.
Did you write this off an anecdote? I mean I never heard of such anecdote but it could make a good one.

The second production was much better than the earlier one.


Phil

Congrats Will; the short turned out really nice.

hey everyone,

just wanted to say thanks so much for the compliments and advice! i definitely plan on rewriting the dialogue sometime in the near future.

thanks again!

Hmm.  I watched this back in March when you posted the newest adaptation.  I wonder why I didn't reply.

But anyway, this was a decent turnout for a quick little story.  I have to say, the magician in black looks really really familiar to me for some reason.

Anyhow, congrats on getting it filmed.

- Mark