Two words, Quintin Tarantino. Mr. Z I like this short. It was very entertaining and well written. If this is what you can do in English one can only imagine what you can do in spanish.

I don't feel you need to change anything as everything rolls out smoothly, but you can always make something better.

Glad you enjoyed it, Inquiringmind. Thanks for letting me know.  

Hi Matias,

Thoroughly enjoyable script.  I loved the spinning the barrel bit and liked that the gun has a soul that only fires upon bad people.

Short & sweet.  Nothing more to add.

All the best,


Javier

Thanks Javier, glad you enjoyed it man.

I did a rewrite on this, based on the feedback I got. Changed nothing essential, but I tried to make the ending a bit less abrupt. Everyone's busy witht the OWC so I'll wait a bit before uploading the new version.

THE MISS
Maybe you should ask Lydia.

Lydia was not introduced to the MISS in the script ...

good job otherwise.

Bert has coined a nice situation. I d love to read the script with the addition.

Thanks razi.

Nice catch. Maybe The Miss should have said "Ask your gun". Or maybe she read the inscription on the barrel? Hmmm...

Hate to admit it but Bert's suggestion was spot on. I'll wait for the OWC to be over before officially uploading the new version, but in the meantime, if anyone else shows up, the rewrite can be found here:

http://www.sendspace.com/file/5qecyy

AAAAA.......Mr. Z .. i read the other version ... i dont know but after putting the outlaw in the jail it seams ... that the mystery about the Outlaw has faded away .. I would rather prefer your older version

Thanks for your honesty, razi. Damn, I suck at rewrites.  

Great job. reminds me of a scene i once saw a long, long time ago. because i don't remember, it makes this a bit original.

chi

Thanks for the read, purplefilms. Much appreciated.

It's always a pleasure to read one of your scripts. superb writing and a superb idea. Lydia felt like a character in itself and it was just a pistol.

with all that spinning action it would be interesting playing Russian Roulette with Lydia but oh yeah I forgot there is only one bullet (soul) at a time so maybe that's not a good idea after all.  

i still belive the mystery wont be thr the moment u have look at the outlaw ...

Thanks for the read, tonka. Glad you felt like the revolver was a character. That was my intention.  

Great story.

What else is there to say?

Any criticism of a story as tight as this would be reaching.
Any praise seems to be just another pat on the back.

Yet, still, I want to say something.

Great story.

'Nuff said.

-Daniel