Thanks for the read Robb, glad you enjoyed it.

Quoted from BRBellerophon I have to admit though, I didn't get the miniature shanty business right at the bat. I had to do a double take and read half of the page twice. Just me, I guess.

It's not just you. I'm getting this quite a lot. Suggestions to make these scenes more clear are more than welcome. Thanks again.

I consider this script to be more of a character exercise than anything else.  You have two strong characters, and some witty banter, but the story fell a little flat for me.  I got nothing out of it, though the idea of bounty hunters in a magical world intrigued me.  It reminded me of a movie where a detective searched for a killer (or something) in a magic-filled version of 1950's Hollywood.

While the use of powder was good, I got a little tired of it.  The two used powder.  They used more powder.  And more powder.  I was hoping for a little mixing up with something else.


Phil

Thanks for the read, Phil. Gotta admit I got a bit lazy and repeated the use of the powder rather than trying to come up with a new trick. Will do in the next draft.  

I found this story hard to follow especially with this replica business going on.  It kinda reminded me of a doll house.  And that the witch was inside peering out and then it switches.  I didn't particularly enjoy this.  Although it probably is best to view it than to read for me.

Javier

Thanks for the honesty, jayrex. Sorry it wasn't for you. I still appreciate the read.