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Undying Love Triangle by Darren J Seeley (darrenjamesseeley) - Short, Horror - When two vampires have an affair, a murder plot unfolds. But the over-the-hill wife isn't that easy to kill. 7 pages - pdf, format
I take it this an expanded edition of an MP script? Well, since I'm not a member of MP, let's dig in.
First three pages read pretty steady, but then it goes wonky on page four. Who the heck are Anton and Ashton?
The like the idea of the love triangle. But when the scissors came out, the exposition got pretty high.
Could be a fun dynamic to add to a failing marriage story. One spouse gets turned into a vampire and it somehow saves the marriage. Interesting premise you got here.
Hypothetically, cheating wife drives away breadwinner husband. He gets turned, now she has to support the family. Fun twist. That is more interesting to me than the "someone's gotta go" scene.
Regards, E.D.
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I take it this an expanded edition of an MP script? Well, since I'm not a member of MP, let's dig in.
First three pages read pretty steady, but then it goes wonky on page four. Who the heck are Anton and Ashton?
The like the idea of the love triangle. But when the scissors came out, the exposition got pretty high.
Could be a fun dynamic to add to a failing marriage story. One spouse gets turned into a vampire and it somehow saves the marriage. Interesting premise you got here.
Hypothetically, cheating wife drives away breadwinner husband. He gets turned, now she has to support the family. Fun twist. That is more interesting to me than the "someone's gotta go" scene.
Regards, E.D.
It's odd- I thought I corrected the Austin - Anton thing. I don't have a clue where the Ashton thing came up. This only happened in the rewrite*, not the original MP 5 pager. The original had a line or two where Beth spoke her thoughts aloud in the car, having almost been caught; most didn't like that, it was expendable anyway. It was also suggested she was more of a guardian-servant role rather than a vampire herself. Here I incorporated some good suggestions where she's also a vampire, although turned late.
I know Pia liked the original version though.
-* I think I know what happened there: the Anton bit was obviously a memory lapse due to revising Abracadabra about the same time. Austin-Ashton didn't show up there in that revision...but Ashton/Austin is a bit tougher to explain. I know some of the MP reviews really ticked me off a little bit...so it's possible I wasn't paying close attention to that sort of thing.
I think I know what happened there: the Anton bit was obviously a memory lapse due to revising Abracadabra about the same time. Austin-Ashton didn't show up there in that revision...but Ashton/Austin is a bit tougher to explain. I know some of the MP reviews really ticked me off a little bit...so it's possible I wasn't paying close attention to that sort of thing.
Hey Darren,
Ah, I get it now. It was uber confusing on the page, all those A...n names. I like the idea of saving a failing marriage in a twisted way with vampires. It's a good idea this triangle, might need more space to fully explore.
Why did the MP reviews tick you off?
Regards, E.D.
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Just started to review on MP and hoping to enter next year. Currently a level 2!! So allowed to enter in February, which is the next one I fancy. Don't think I came across your entry.
Have you entered in this months?
Had a quick read. Vampires arent my thing but the idea of a love triange with them has potential. I liked the fact that either the wife is in on this or it's not unusual. A nice reversal on what we were led to believe at the beginning. In the last scene I sensed an element of cronebergs "crash" ( I haven't seen this so don't quote me) where they get off alongside car accidents.
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