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Glad to hear you enjoyed it as I really had a blast writing it.
I feel the big smile at the end revealing his past will have a hidden and subtle, "I stuck it up them all" and even leave a few questions unanswered.
I did look at doing the fairy tale ending where he becomes wealthy, though it may have been predictable and may not have given a message that would make the viewer think further. I am sure it will work well on the screen.
Hopefully one day I can post a link to the movie If I ever get a producer.
Just after some advice with this one ! I have had a few producers keen on this one, and one in NY who was looking at adapting it to a similar location in NY though they have disappeared of the face of the earth.
Just curious if anyone thinks I should adapt this script to a generic location and drop off the Sydney location, even renaming it to "Becoming a Property Tycoon" ????
What do you think ?? Would a producer be so short sighted to not realize he can adapt it to other locations?
Just curious if anyone thinks I should adapt this script to a generic location and drop off the Sydney location, even renaming it to "Becoming a Property Tycoon" ????
What do you think ?? Would a producer be so short sighted to not realize he can adapt it to other locations?
I could easily see this adapted, even though its becoming a sydney property tycoon theres not that much of references to syndney itself aside from the SYDNEY HARBOUR BRIDGE and the SYDNEY OPERA HOUSE i believe, remove those and turn the foreshore scene where he is taking a stroll in the park just label it as a park. I could easily imagine this taking place near the new york central park or some other large city because the feel is there.
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When I first saw the title I thought it was a comedy and the idea would make a great feature length comedy IMO, but its a good read my only objection is that it felt like a slow read, yet im not sure how if could be fixed but nicely done.
I will rename and trim out the references to Sydney, therefore making it more generic.
I have had a lot of interest in the screenplay as it is a bit of lighthearted fun and will be great to watch.
Never thought of incorporating this into a feature though it could be a comedy and much can be added to it. Great idea and I will keep that in mind.
The parts that are slower to read are probably because of all the back and forth during the construction of the house, I can do this in a series of Quickflash's though not sure if it would be as effective on film. More thought there.
The parts that are slower to read are probably because of all the back and forth during the construction of the house, I can do this in a series of Quickflash's though not sure if it would be as effective on film. More thought there.
Those parts felt fine for the flow, I wouldn't change those keep those as is. It was more of when he made it to the bank the vibe changed to where it was more of a soft light comedy because some of it made me smile and the end made me laugh abit, so the tempo changed there abit. As I think about it if it was labeled a Drama, Comedy vs just a Drama It would feel right.
I guess Scott's personality changes as he puts on the suit and becomes someone else ? Not sure if this is what has caused the change as it is a bit of a Dr Jeckel Mr Hyde type effect.
Once people relate to him more maybe he opens up more and hence the flow of the script changes ???
I will go over the bank part and see where it needs changing, I think previous comments did mention the strength of the bank managers character so I will look at a rewrite to this part and see how i can change it to read easier.
Just to let you know this screenplay has just gone through a name change and a logline change to make it more location generic. Thanks Don for updating the thread.
For those of you who have not read it b4 please have a read and let me know your thoughts.