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I think you would get more interest if people knew this was about Leonardo Da Vinci. Everyone loves Da Vinci (I do anyway). Didn't realise it until I started reading, I'm dim like that. Maybe the title could be 'Parties by Da Vinci'? (but what do I know?) I sense a Monty Python thing going on (or Carry on Leo?).
The period characters were well realised, my only criticism on that, they seemed a bit too 'contemporary Americanized (even I don't know what I mean by that). But it is clear this is a tongue in cheek piece. I liked that comic dark ending, that's real British humour. Like the scene introducing Lino bursting out of the cake, made me think of Pope Leo X's greater excesses (that would make a great subject for a script). I like the party scene where we get to see all of Da Vinci's noted inventions (I would have loved to see something with Da Vinci's bronze horse, but I'm digressing again). I thought Leo and Roberto's talk at the start could have been shorter. The story was quite warm despite the ending, it left a sweet taste in the mouth. Pg 1. - 'Leo Laughs' - add Full stop This is quite an indulgent short and would be expensive, and that is not counting the twin kids you'll have to find. I felt it lent itself more to a feature. A British comedy flick (please, no Eric Idle in the lead!)
This was written for the last but one writing challenge on this very site, so I threw all budget considerations out of the window and indulged myself... I also don't normally write comedy, so was a bit of an experiment in that regards too.
I am considering expanding the concept so will keep all your comments in mind.