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Had a read of the script and then watched the short.
I read all the previous comments so I know your feelings about the film, but I like it. Looks good, sounds good, unfortunately the problem is that without reading the script, this --
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MAN (V.O.) ...not my fear of failing. (beat) But my fear of letting go.
-- doesn’t really come though.
So I can see your frustration. I imagine it would have been so easy to add the V.O. in post and it gives the whole thing meaning, but what can you do.
Maybe you just have to sell it as an arthouse film
Hmm. Like you say, it's quite nicely shot, but went way off script (removing the voice over?) and therefore lost nearly all of the original intention. Damn. It does say, 'based on' in the end titles I suppose... Shame that, the scripted version was a lot better!
It won some awards but one of them was in an 'experimental' category or something silly like that. Personally I can't sand that shit haha... I like a story to have the balls to say what it's about rather than hiding behind vague nonsense.
Still, a credit is all good and at this stage I guess I have to just make do with whoring myself out haha
Max, did you have an exclusive agreement with the filmmaker? If not, state on the thread that this is available again.
A lot of upcoming filmmakers want something to add to their showreel and this does the trick cause it's a beautifully filmed snippet of what he or she can do. I didn't really care for the music because I didn't think it added much emotionally. Having said that there wasn't much emotionally to the story arc as filmed anyway.
I read the script as well. I think this could be terrific if you could develop it a bit more, add a little more V.O. and add to the story. It doesn't need to be much but to actually show his epiphany and him 'letting go' we need to see the struggle first.
Nope, never had an exclusive deal with him. And funnily enough there is a longer version as he asked me to add a bit more to it, then didn't use it anyways (grrr!).
Hadn't thought about it until you mentioned it but I'll probably submit the longer one now.
Cheers, I appreciate the advice It's solid.
"P.S. I also have experienced the filmmaker giving themself a writer credit because they changed an Aussie slang word to U.S. equivalent."
You need to send an email to webmaster@simplyscripts.com
Include a link to the vid and the name of the script. I can take it from there. If you have a poster handy, include that, but not necessary.
The reason for the email is I tend to work out of my email and the chances of me forgetting to do it are less.
Don
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Max,
You send an email to webmaster@simplyscripts.com with the subject line, "Come bask in my reflected glory"
Begin with, "To the lovely and talented Don, I now rank amongst the heady few who have been produced, look upon my work {title of script} at: {video link} and despair. "
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