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Posted: October 29th, 2017, 10:09am Report to Moderator
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Ashes by Manish Sharma - Short, Drama - What happens when you see yourself die every night in a terrible dream? 5 pages - pdf, format

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Manish - you have spacing issues throughout.

This form the opening:


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DAVID,40,plump and unshaven,lies on a black couch,eyes
closed.He frequently runs his tongue over his lips.
MARIA,35,fair and slim,wearing a white coat,sits next to him
on a revolving chair.She scribbles something on a notepad,
puts it aside and observes her patient with concern.


I bolded the places where you need a space - again - this is an issue throughout the script. Give it a good clean-up.


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