Hey Gianluca,
Gave this a quick peak and though I'd give my two cents.
First off, no logline is a HUGE issue. That's your first chance to grab a readers interest. A bad logline is better than no logline at all.
Once I opened the script up, a whole new set of issues popped up. This needs a serious rewrite, I'm afraid. Tons of issues throughout the first page alone. Why are there no periods? Sorry, but i won't continue beyond that. If you do a rewrite and fix this, PM me and I'll give this another shot.
Zack |