I like this one in many ways. A teenage girl works her father after he picks her up at school. The banter is good, a mix between grown-up and little girl. But there's a bit too much of it. The story doesn't really take off till she gets behind the wheel, which I think you can do more quickly. Also, you need to use a comma in a direct address. 'It's time to go, Bill' is not the same as 'It's time to go Bill.'
The dialogue is nice but can be scrubbed. Dad and daughter are going to pack a lot of meaning into a few words.