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Posted: April 2nd, 2017, 10:09am
So, what are you writing?
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by Alan Clark - Short, Family, Action, Drama - When challenged for power by a group of angry followers, Moses leaves it up to God to decide who’s who and who’s not who. 9 pages - pdf, format
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Posted: August 9th, 2017, 6:53pm
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hanging out of every orifice
Technically they would only be hanging out of his ears. Does he have nose rings, eyebrow rings, is that what you mean?
slams his hand against a wooden post. He looks at Korah before his emotions spew forth before the congregation
I don't like this constant use of formatting choice, it really messes with the read "Dathan slams his hand..." achieves the exact same purpose, our focus is still on Dathan.
That was tough to get through. Not for me.
I think the general formatting has room for improvement.
Story wise, this will divide people because of the subject matter. I'm not going to turn this into a religious discussion, but for me the story was still lacking in substance.
All the best.
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Posted: September 6th, 2017, 6:14am
English, self taught comedy writer
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How does someone get fat in the desert? Anyway, I'm not sure what to say about this one, really, as I've never been a fan of biblical films. As far as I know this was a perfectly reasonable script, but to me I found it a bit dull. That's not surprising as the subject was so serious. I think making your script more entertaining would be inappropriate, so this is a tough one. As far as I'm concerned I didn't really think anything was wrong with it. If you ever got this filmed, maybe all the action could compensate for the seriousness.
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