hanging out of every orifice
Technically they would only be hanging out of his ears. Does he have nose rings, eyebrow rings, is that what you mean?
slams his hand against a wooden post. He looks at Korah
before his emotions spew forth before the congregation
I don't like this constant use of formatting choice, it really messes with the read "Dathan slams his hand..." achieves the exact same purpose, our focus is still on Dathan.
That was tough to get through. Not for me.
I think the general formatting has room for improvement.
Story wise, this will divide people because of the subject matter. I'm not going to turn this into a religious discussion, but for me the story was still lacking in substance.
All the best.