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Posted: February 19th, 2019, 1:51pm Report to Moderator
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Bus of Light by Nicholas Philippa - Short, Horror - A bus of clergymen travel the country conducting exorcisms, unknowingly they run into an entity more powerful than they could have imagined. 6 pages - pdf format

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Pretty cool, I'd love to see what happens next.

Couple of things, it was a lot of jargon. I spent a good portion of this googling different words to see what they were, and I was raised catholic too.

It felt a little cheesy these clergymen have daggers and tombs, yet are using water balloons. I don't have an alternative, but it took me out of that moment that leads to a horrific stab session.

There were some words capitalized for reasons I'm not sure too. I'd be careful with that.

Dying to know (no pun intended) how he survived, and where evil dad and son go next. Keep at it, this was fun.


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