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Don
Posted: June 22nd, 2017, 10:37pm Report to Moderator
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Mirror by Robert A. Braverman - Short, Sci Fi - Aliens trick woman into killing others, then leave to her fate. 3 pages - pdf, format

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Hi Robert,

This needs a lot of work. Some people don't care about formatting but this is so, so far off. You really need to read more scripts and see how it's done.

You need proper scene headings not just scene 1, 2, 3. You need to established where and when the action is taking place.

The story is lacking as well, not much here and it doesn't make a whole lot of sense.

Best of luck.


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