Eh.

Quoted from CameronD Eh.

I hadn't picked up that Adam was Canadian

Liked it quite a bit. My first instinct was where did a kid get a sword, but I can buy into this more than I can the mental patient giving out the 20s. Solid 4.

I have to read this again after forty winks and come back to this...

Rover One, To The Flame, and A Samurai's Tale - all open with an altered reality - either of the imagination or fantasy. All are good scripts and all three would benefit from being filmed with at least partial animation, imho. Iron Egg: Origins, too - animation/claymation.

A Samurai's Tale - well done! We travel from the 'verdant hills' of Tokyo to the grim reality of a kid in a trailer home.

You took me on a solid journey with a one-pager. No easy task.

I didn't like this too much.  So he kills his stepdad and mom??  Why??  I'm confused.  It's a 3 from me.

Dan

Dan,

No, he kills his stepdad after his stepdad kills his mom, like in the story about the Warrior.

AJR

Quoted from ajr Dan, No, he kills his stepdad after his stepdad kills his mom, like in the story about the Warrior. AJR

Oh.  That's better.  It still needs to be cleaned up.  More pages will fix that.

Oh just realized an ewwwwwwwww  thing.  The samurai loves the woman in his story.  But, that woman turns out to be his mom.  Oedipus Rex going on here??  Gotta admit, it certainty becomes much darker.

Dan

Switching the loved-one's relationship didn't bother me. I just wondered where the hell he got his hands on a katana. Kitchen knife would have more sense to me, but I can understand the need to make the parallels absolutely clear in a one-page script.