Overall, you did a good job with the action sequences.

The thing that doesn't make much sense to me is why the government people in hazmat suits would be there. He put out a signal and was contacted by an alien just as the government shows up at the same time? Maybe this was insinuating that the government was also listening in...but it's a little hard to digest IMO. Maybe pick one or the other...or have the government guys show up a little later?

Good work!

I think you should stick with the dating website and the alien being 'his one'. The Hazmat guys, the helicopter... a little incongruous.

Something that could definitely be developed and work very nicely.

He's looking for a date, any date. The military's looking for some clue, any clue, about what the hell the alien's up to. When they get a hit, the military goes to get Lonely Guy (a la "The Arrival").

That's how I read it, anyway.

I'm happy for him. I wonder whether they will...nevermind.

Quoted from Stumpzian I wonder whether they will...nevermind.

It was implied that neverminding was a distinct possibility.

Quoted from FrankM It was implied that neverminding was a distinct possibility.

Bloated

I didn't get it. Probably says more about me than the script though. A 3 for ambition.

Writer,

Nice writing, descriptive, but just didn’t get it. And with the lack of a logline, seems like maybe you had trouble getting it too. Good effort, though.

Steve