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Don
Posted: February 14th, 2004, 10:59pm Report to Moderator
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Fate 2 by Matt C - Short, Drama - Three weeks after the events that lead Daniel Ellis to where he is now... - html* format.


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should this really be a sequel?  would it not be better to have this incorporated into the FATE script and try to make a 'whole story' rather than 2 shorts that only play for like a minute each?

take your time with it - show us more about your characters and let them live and breath before you decide he should be slitting his wrist or telling us how gay he is or whatever.

i would say the second part is better but it's still not a story - it's just information giving and forcing us what to feel - or at least that's how i felt from reading it


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i um....well......didn't like the first one
but this one has a little bit more skill


He wanted to talk.  I wanted to shoot.
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So I figured this was better.  I agree with the Shaman.  However, I think that if you put them together, the porno crowd might be a bit disappointed by this sequel.

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Are you kidding me with this?  Seriously, are you kidding?

He's laying there in a casket with blood pouring out of his arms?  What'd he, go straight from the razor blade into the casket?  Did they have the casket ready ahead of time?

Hold on, Darla says "It was just his time"??!! Did I read that correctly?  Whose time is it at fourteen years old??

I love that a "viscous" spray of blood ejects from his exposed wrist though.  That's classic.  

And it was nice to meet Osten.  I think he was my favorite..... Aw, why'd ya only give him one line?



true love waits... i guess.
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